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Hm.. Just some poem I wrote in class.

 

Tip-toe around the world,

From star to star at night,

Peek through clouds and sit on the moon,

She’ll be in your dreams tonight.

 

Hear the midnight air,

Smell the crescent moon,

Feel with just your fingers,

The graceful night-time noon.

 

See the dream you’ve always dreamed,

Live the world that makes you smile,

Tonight darling, my sweet bee,

This fair maiden will put you to a trial.

 

A dream of no mirrors but there is just one deal,

To be or not to be in a world of no disdain?

And with a mere kiss she has trapped you,

In a world solely meant for the insane.

 

I’m tip-toeing around the world,

From star to star in a plight,

I’ve set the dream siren free for eternity,

But I’ll be in her dreams tonight.

 

 

By; Arasinya Adora

February 05^th, 2010

11:03AM

Author's Note

Uh, Lemme know what yew think!!! <3

Reviews

[Arthur Crow]

This is enchanting! You wove many hypnotic and exquisite lines with intellect and magick... Very much enjoyed the mood and imagery throughout.. you have a natural ability to create fine word art.

[Michael X]

stunning! the opening lines create a sense of lost enchantment when taken
with the title, and what follows is a perfect combinations of abstract and artistry for example "Peek through clouds and sit on the moon," such brilliant lines create
a dreamily quite fun reading experience. you are quite talented:)