You, My Hopeless Dream

Kind of a stream-of-consciousness? Bleh

You said

I always know

What to say,

So let me say this…

I am too strong

To let one man

Be so                       careless,

And break me.

                                        You were never mine…

I am so hidden

Inside of myself,

I’ve forgotten

How not to be            kind.

But you were my dream…

Let me say

That I am too

Tired…

To care if I                   bleed,

But have mercy…

I am fragile…

I am so far away

Inside my mind,

I thought I was unbreakable

For a                             while.

And then you came to me…

And let me say this…

That I forgot

Myself…

With a single                hope

That we could be…

But you were never mine.

You said

I always knew

What to say,

So let me say this…

I am broken,

But I will be fine…

And so I will let you go

Like the hopeless dream

You were meant to be…

Because this is the right thing to say,

Even

if

it

kills

me…

Reviews

[Rachel Landes]

F*****g awesome! The layout is so original and quirky, and the poem is so clear and real.

[Adora.xo]

Awe, thank you so much! :)

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

Tragically beautiful piece!

[Adora.xo]

Yeah, it was a personal piece :) thank you

[Sami Khalil]

This is a very good poem. I like it alot...Thank you for posting...:)

[Adora.xo]

thank you!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)...................

[MOON]

Lovely write, the hardest thing is letting go but perhaps best thing to do!

[Adora.xo]

Sometimes you've just gotta do it... right? :) Thanks for the review!

[Everett DeValle]

A heart breaking read...some times people grow apart...and letting go is the only way to find out, if thd love it was true or not...awesome emotions conveyed in a woven tapestry of poetic words. Nicely done.

[Adora.xo]

Thank you kindly :)

[Everett DeValle]

You are most welcome, Adora...forgive me for my tardiness in reading and reviewing, at times...but know I think you are a wonderful writer. :)

[Adora.xo]

Nothing to apologize for :) I don't actually expect anyone to review my writings but when people do it's a welcome surprise, and great appreciated!

[Everett DeValle]

Me too! I remember getting my first review back in 1999, I was like a kid in a toy store...the review was simple too...'This was great! I shared it with my boyfriend. We both loved it.' I was very encouraged...I still feel that way today. :)

[Alana McGuire]

Oooh I love this. The layout reminds me of something you would read in an Ellen Hopkins book.
Sometimes letting go really is best, even if it feels so wrong. Lovely write :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Love teaches us we can be weak as a child and when the love is alive. We can roar like lions. I like the set-up of the poem. Allowing the views to interact together. Sometime we must release a lover to know real peace. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Adora.xo]

Thank you for reviewing! I think that sometimes, it's better to let go. For everyone's sake.

[Tate Morgan]

We all recover from our lost loves and young love especially always is granted a second chance

[Adora.xo]

Thank you for the kind words

[MoriartyMesa]

Hopeless, is another window of truth.

[Adora.xo]

It can be, I suppose.

[Dutch Jr.]

You do a great job setting the air of hopelessness, and giving up on, what seems like love, in this poem. It is said that the only people that can truly hurt us emotionally are the ones we truly care about. I love this one.

[Adora.xo]

Thank you very much :')