Every

Every
Touch
Gives
Me
Bumps
Upon
My
Skin.
Every
Look
Sends
Shivers
Down
My spin.
Every
Feeling
That
I
Get,
Mixes
Into
One.

Reviews

[Danielle Asher]

great form. you seem really creative from the 2 pieces I have already read. I am glad i found your page.

peace,
Danielle

[Kevin Galbreath]

Spin should be spine I think.

It wasn't what I expected when I clicked to open the poem. The one line one word is a style I've not seen before.

[Ryan D. Mosley]

Ahh.... This is an OK poem, but I really feel that you didn't develop it into it's true potential. You need to go back and work it. I appreciate the efforts of the "one word a line" style, but it's not very appealing. You need to make about two or three words a line then it will have a good meter and sound a lot better. You need the add a lot more to this poem, like go more into detail about what each thing does, and tell more actions that affect you. I really do believe that this poem can be made into a very good one with a lot of effort, determination, and some elbow grease. Overall: It was OK