Broken Promises

I lay awake every night.
Thinking of every promise that you have broken.
Don't you see your killing yourself?
Slow suicide.

I explain that you need to stop.
You say you will but is it enough?
Every time you've said that,
You have lied.
I say stop.
You say go.
I say dead.
You say no.

So has every thing you've ever told me a lie?
Seems like it so far.
Me entire childhood,
You said you would stop.
Stop everything and just focus on me.
Because of you, I can't stand it.
I see it and I start crying.
Think of all of the promises,
You have broken for a beer.

Reviews

[~crazy Beautiful~]

I like your writing style very much, the emotions were powerful here.
these lines
"Think of all of the promises,
You have broken for a beer."
were my favorite"
nice work
thank you for entering my contest

[Danielle Asher]

really great piece. I like your style of writing a lot. Thanks for sharing your words. I look forward to reading more of your work.

peace,
Danielle

[*~Imperfectly Me~*]

Very good... It's sad when someone breaks their promises especially when it's for a beer.... Great job!

[Kevin Galbreath]

Not bad. I look forward to reading more of you stuff.

Are your writings based on true life or impressions?

[a Messenger]

Very well written. You have expressed a lot of pain and disappointment. Alcohol is the cause of many broken promises, distorted values, heartache and pain. Like Lori I am sorry you had to experience it so young. It's good you have your writing for an outlet to relieve at least some of the pain.
I wish you well.

Jerry

[lori c]

i hope that whoever you wrote this to listened to you. i felt your pain, your aloneness, the wetness of your tears, your fears. this is a struggle as old as time and families and fermentation. and i wish you hadnt had to experience it at such a tender age. no fancy words, just honesty. good job.