Ravens

This little boy can't understand what he wants.
His mind too crowded with too many thoughts
This little raven, can't make up his mind.
Denying the fact that he's a little too blind.

This little girl so stuck in love,
With the little boy who's risen above.
These ravens so mischievous.
There seems to be no end to this.

See, this little boy, oh raven of mine.
How I wish you saw that little girl shine.
Whenever you made your big debut.
But things are starting to look so new.

This little girl so stuck in love,
With the little boy who's grown up,
With these ravens so in love.
But to the little boy, this isn't enough.

This young gentleman so stuck in isolation.
Ever so sweet, ever so young, you're her creation.
She's so willing to fly away with you.
But you're so protective of her value.

This young lady with desires to be free,
With the young gentleman who cannot see.
The ravens becoming so much more.
But knows the consequences of gambling before.

Reviews

[Closed Account]

Love this!

[HorrorMaster]

Very good

[Jill Wallflower]

I like this. Its almost like a song, almost like its telling a wonderful story. Its so well written and flowing.

[The Exception]

It's almost like lyrics. I like that there's also a chronological story within it that captivates the reader or at least me. Also how it's open to different perspectives. It flows nicely and the imagery really speaks to me. I really like it!

[sarah]

Amazing poem great work!

[Short.Nerd]

I love it!! Nice job (:

[Linear]

In the end we all take a gamble on love, dont we? very good poem

[Drey Mitchell]

I love your rhymes and the simplicity of the poem. Beautiful !

[Jonathan De Elvira]

attractive rhythm, it flowed so well..

[LittleGuitar94]

This is brilliant! The rhyme is so perfect and i love the story that it creates in my mind.
Great write!