PERFECT

thinking about your soft kisses,how you are perfect in every way

 

I was thinking about you today

And how I never know what to say

I was thinking of what I would do if I didn't have you

And if it was true
I was thinking of how happy I am when your around
Thinking of how you make me smile
Even when I have a frown
I was thinking of how much I long to be with you
thinking of how much I love you
Even if you cant be mine

Not yet
I was thinking of never wanting to let you go

Thinking how we could grow
I was thinking about your soft kisses

And what it would be like to be your misses
I was thinking about you today

And if I was dreaming

I think about you every day

On how you are perfect in every way
 

Reviews

[Eldee]

Sometimes, here and there, your rhyming sounded a bit forced, then you skipped from rhyming to not rhyming and it was just a little bit confusing from a reader's perspective. While open poetry usually doesn't stick to either/or, it usually does have breaks between switches, etc. and that's just something that will help a reader continue with the flow of the poem more.
The content was very emotional and lovely :). You caught a story with your words, allowed the reader to see a picture, and let it go- very few writers can do that. Good job!

[Dalaina Renee]

I am thinking of someone too. Thinking sucks. Doing is the great part!Lol I enjoyed reading this!