LOST HEART

 

Ive been writting These Lines for far to long

No longer able to stay so strong

Tell me Love, What Is there left To say

The Time we could have are fading away

Im nothing more then simple sorrow

  till the the darkest cornors of the morrow

So Find me an Answer and I will Give you time

Write Me a song and I will Give you a ryhme

Fade into black with the intent of all

Fade into grey with the promise to fall

Find me In pools of broken Tears

Lock me in a room with unresolved fears

Take me from this forever and the things you used to say

For poetic words I had For you are now upon a stray

Leave me here in the shadows that only you and I will ever see

for the Love I had was lost and no longer is the key

Reviews

[The Elder Pine]

I liked this piece; I can really see that you have some talent. I liked the rhyme; I think it added something to the grand scheme of the piece. One thing I would suggest is attempting to make some of them internal rhymes rather then external rhymes. That will add a little bit of a higher degree of difficulty to the piece and challenge you more. The more you work at it the better you become, and I think you can be very good. Nice write, thank you for sharing.