FORBIDDEN LOVE

 

 

 

 

 

 

When Darkness Falls I wait for you

When The Sun Rises I dream of you

Something About you causes my heart to fly

Wanting you daily I know not why

I know I cannot make you my own

 

 

But the lust I have is always shown

When your tongue touches my lips

A succulant bite between my hips

Happily Worshipping your consistence

Even from a far distance

It feels so right

It would be easy to do

Oh, Only If you really knew

Satisfiying you 

 

Reviews

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I think you mean " Forbidden" this was pretty good. "The lust I have IS always shown" NOT "are always shone" You have a singular object, (lust) so you must have a singular verb (is). I would like to know more detail in the poem as well. It asks a lot of questions to the reader.