Scabs

An open letter from husband to estranged wife.

I'm sugar rushed and need a transfusion out of this wine induced haze, a cool breeze whips through my hair and I feel weightless.

Flying on the breath of a lie, words hollowed out and lined with X's and O's brimming at the seams. Upon closer inspection the words are not words at all, and the threads have caught.

Stray once again I howl through the streets like the mad man I've always wanted to be, descending down the backs of wallflowers shuddering under my gaze, looking to find you once again.

Author's Note

What do you think? All reviews and comments are much appreciated.

Reviews

[Carol Cashes]

"descending down the backs of wallflowers shuddering under my gaze, looking to find you once again. " Nicely done. Wallflowers are against the wall for a reason: mad men like you. Good job.

[Xuru]

Much thanks!

[apennylate]

Fantastic, I need an infusion of wine to get through the daze of being alive... Weightlessly, this poem settled upon the streets of my heart... But sugar and X might add some, hah... Very neatly and nicely penned... I am a fan

[Xuru]

It feels so good to hear you say that.

Always appreciate it.

Thank you!

[apennylate]

Of course, my pleasure... Keep at it...!

[BBP]

Really loved this piece. Wild and sweet. You balanced it well.

[Xuru]

Thank you BBP!

[Angel]

It was good, I love how when I read it I could visual the scene. Hope you keep adding on to it. Good job.

[Xuru]

I'll probably leave it as is, but thank you for the kind words.

[Angel]

You are welcome.

[rowan.taylorrr]

i really like the way this is written, i love it!

[Xuru]

Thank you so much!

Happy you enjoyed this.

[nightshade]

way to short for a story, and I'm not sure that you should have put it in the story category. as a poem it is pretty good I like all the imagery that you have included and all of the metaphors in the poem.

[Xuru]

I always have a hard time picking categories and classifying them before I write them.

read moreI always have a hard time picking categories and classifying them before I write them.

Thank you.

[Nora]

This is pretty awesome poem, i love the way you choose the word to express 😊

[Xuru]

I'm happy you enjoyed it.

[Nora]

❤❤❤❤❤❤❤❤ ❤

[pia]

This was nicely written.
The words used here fit in perfectly.
I can actually picture and also feel the man's emotions in this one. The pain he has to deal with. And how he needs alcohol to numb that feeling of loneliness and abandonment. Drives him crazy just knowing he lost a companion
Nicely done !!

[Xuru]

Thank you so much Pia!

[diaphanous]

Really raw, and the impact is much greater in its brevity. Well done.

[Xuru]

Thank you for the kind words.

[Raven Moonchild]

This is excellent. :) "Flying on the breath of a lie" Genius.

[Xuru]

Means a lot coming from you.

Thanks for taking the time to read it.

[Raven Moonchild]

Awww,you're sweet. :)

Thank you for sharing your work. :)