Mud

I don't recognize my own voice, the lump in my throat grows.
My spine curves to the sharp bends in the road.

Dead end.

She won't love me forever.

Reviews

[Elephant]

This is beautiful and honest, so great.

[Xuru]

I'm glad you liked it.

[Poetic Angel]

this is painfully perfect...

[Xuru]

Why thank you!

[London]

It's beautiful, in a smog filled greasy sky kind of way. pessimistic poetry is ironically one of the most real kinds left. hardcore self doubt and I hope you have more confidence Away from keyboard than the portrayal in the text.

[Xuru]

Oddly enough I wouldn't consider myself a pessimist as my writing suggests.

[London]

That's good! Stay rad, this is some great text :)

[Poetic Beauty]

Sounds like self doubt and being afraid to commit because of it

[Xuru]

Yes ma'am.

[duff]

I enjoy poetry with possibility and this checks that box. It's got grimy intrigue. Your title fits the content as well. I really like this piece. Great work.

[Xuru]

Thank you Duff.

[duff]

You are very welcome.

[Kelly B.]

Amazing! Short and powerful. The feels...

[Xuru]

Feels and more feels.

[Kevin Doy Burton]

Very passionate.I like it.

[Xuru]

Glad you like.

[Kevin Doy Burton]

Feel free to post a review on one of my stories.

[Bluebird91]

This poem feels deep in a shallowed pool of depression. I LOVE IT!!!

[Xuru]

On a side note, I love your profile picture.

[Bluebird91]

thank you!

[Addict With a Pen]

Last line is just a punch to the gut. I like it, how you expressed what it's like realizing such terrible truths. A great, short piece.

[Xuru]

Very sad truths indeed.

[V]

Clarity hit hard, realized creatively. I like the power in your words and the images you chose and combined with your word choices.
I think many people can relate to the feeling when awful disillusion makes your seat in reality. There's something almost panicking or adrenaline-like woven into the calm of realization in your words of closure, like racing too fast in a street with too many curves.

[Xuru]

That review was more in depth than some of the stories here.

Thank you!!

[V]

You're very welcome. Nice to get to know that.
I wouldn't say so in general but I know what you mean..

[Coffee Vampier]

It leaves an opening for the imagination as to what the story behind it is.

[Xuru]

Thank you!!