The Running Nightmare !

your slipping through the cracks,

your slipping through my fingers,

i keep trying to catch you.

pull you back.

but this gap, 

it grows more everyday,

you.

 with baseball,

and me. 

with soccer,

never get our time,

i saw u with her,

laughing.

smileing.

the glimmer in your eye shinning brighter than ever.

she was your first love,

your TURE love!

and you walk away from me,

and return to your one and only.

__________________________________________________________

this is my nightmare.

the bad dream-

-i fear of coming true,

mabey thats why i always leave,

mabey thats why i always run.

run before it gets bad,

run before the fear,

the dream.

before the nightmare,

 becomes reality.

i run.

far.

till this dream, is nothing more than memory,

i run.

the pain,

i create it,

the heartbreak,

i control it.

my feet,

i force them,

but this time i wont run,

i wont dream,

i wont think of what could be.

i will live in the moment,

every one we get to spend,

i wont just run away,

i wont hide, not another day.

im staying where i am,

and ill let the pain in.

im done running,

u need to come to me!

Author's Note

sorry this is bad, but its what i feel, i havent written in a while, so it seems like im starting new, but here ya go, i hope you enjoy it, please comment! <3

Reviews

[Jack Isaac]

This poem does in fact remind me of one of those dreams where one is running and running but can't get away --and is so effectively written. Flow is perfect except for grammar that stops the reader --'mabey'.
The first part reads like a day in the life and the twist is that it's really the nightmare. That's a good twist! I like this very much!
Consider what makes sense though: "When comes the rain again, I have to run inside" yet the conclusion in this poem seems to be resolving to stay out in the rain --let me know if I am off about that.

[R J Askew]

It's an urgent expression of pain, hope and defiance. I think the poem is in three parts not just two. I esp like the defiance in the last part. Maybe another poem can now be written on what the outcome has been.

[strange_gurl]

i love this poem, its sooo deep and its so true keep it up,u r well talented

[Chris Yip]

Thanks for the good write and read. Well expressed poem from the heart and mind. So true of love and its painful side. Well done. keep the good work going.

[rae52]

it's good and it's what you feel your getting across the message so well done

[Summer'sBreeze]

that was heartbreaking
but beautiful

[Boldpen]

Bad? If this is bad then may I ask you the definition of brilliant?
I loved it? The flow was so wonderfully enchanting that I read it four times in a row, just for pleasure.
The words were chosen cleverly to portray desperate and fearful feelings of the writer.
Great job!

[manifesto]

This poem has undertones of sadness, but I can feel the strength and determination in the words, which makes it all the more lovely.

[~ Stefanie ~]

This isn't bad at all! There are a few spelling errors thorughout though.
'mabey' is actually spelled 'maybe'
"she was your first love,
your TURE love!" You need to switch the 'u' and the 'r' around.
"i saw u with her,
laughing.
smileing" You don't need the 'e' in smiling.
Other than these few minor things I thought the poem was actually pretty good. It showed a lot of emotion and it definitely portrayed to the reader what the poem was all about. You did a really good job with this!

[Leave me alone....]

love this Voctoria, you're poems are all amazing!