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I'm filled with wrath
And, I can't see the right path

This demonic energy
Messing with my memory

Making me numb
Making me succumb
This fleeting power
From this foolish anger

Those lame excuses for people
Who destroys such a thing called "peaceful"
They make me puke
They make me rebuke

Yet I'm so tired
I can't do anything even if I desired
Ergo let me rest
For it would be the best

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[Aurora Lynn]

A very well written poem! Normally, I tend to avoid writing poems that rhyme (though I read them all of the time) because mine tend to sound stupid. Yet this one is very good, expresses your feelings while still rhymeing.

I especially like the line 'Yet I'm so tired/I can't do anything even if I desired/Ergo let me rest/For it would be the best' That one stanza is so true of lots of things. Sometimes we want to do something to help people, yet we can't do anything even if we wanted to.

One small thing (and it is truely a small thing) is in the first stanza, the line 'And, I can't see the right path' I'm not sure if the comma was entirely neccessary there, and it kind of inturrupts the flow of the line.

Other than that thing, I throughly enjoyed this poem. I look forward to reading more of your works.