The Kiss

 

The Kiss

Your lips softly kissing mine
Teasing mine with there softness
Shivers running through my body
Your tongue teasing my lips open
Willingly I respond
Slowly our tongues meet
Needs growing stronger
The Kiss depends

Passion rising to a flame

Your hands twined in my hair
Your lips on my neck
Slowly you undress me
Skin burning with fire
Eyes gray with desire
Our passion rising to a flame

Burning Desire

Moans softly coming from my lips
My lips on your ear
Tender whispers
I undress you
Lips to your neck
Softly I caress you
Both bodies and souls
Burning with desire

Tender Love

Bodies meeting as one
Slowly we move
Eyes meeting
hands caressing
Words of love spoken
Tender is our love

A Beautiful End

Bodies moving together
Sounds of love filling the room
Faster we move
Desire, Passion, Love
What a beautiful end

4-13-00

Reviews

[EvesDaughter]

a kiss is always inspirational...
You have a romantic heart, I
can see this, and your passion
is felt. Good work.

My only suggestions are:
line two: "there" should be "their"
(an easy boo boo)

and, because the kiss is such a
wonderful thing (whew!) it's easy
to fall into romantic cliche's...
ie., "burning desire..."

Also, try not to use the same
word over and over unless it is
intended for repetitive cadence.
The word 'teasing' was used twice
in the same stanza - try and think
of another word to replace teasing.

Writing from the heart is always
good to read. Thanks.

Eve

[whispersoftly]

Whew....that was sweet and lustfully good!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I must say you have quite a romanic way with words in the art of love making... the scene played out in my mind as you took us from the first kiss to the climax of the sweet act... very soft, sexy and hot piece.

[Kelley Pascoe]

very romantic with just a touch of lust (smile)
Great write!!! Thanks for sharing.
Kelley Frost

[Dezaraye]

This is a passionate and sensual piece. Wow ... I'm a little breathless after reading it. You definitely carried me away into such a wonderful romance.

[Angelic Darkness]

This was a very good poem. The flow is beautiful, and the words simple,
yet are strongly felt. This poem sounds like a love song, something to be
sung:).

[S.E. Conway]

wow.. i really really like this one. everything from how it is writtn to the words you used. very very good job indeed!!

-s.e.