The Vow

I miss you more than I can express,

My heart feels as if I died that day,

I look forward to death I must confess,

 

As I stare at the moon shining brightly,

I vow you have my love for eternity,

I will dream of you and only you nightly.

 

As surely as the wind whispers your name,

I will hold on to you even though the next life,

Until you can kiss the lips you already claim.

 

As the flower blooms under the shining sun,

I will forever search through every life,

Until we can once again lie as one.

 

As surely as the moon controls the tide

I will re-write the fate of this story,

Until I hold the hand of my love that died,

 

As surely as the sun will set each day,

I shall defy the will of the gods above,

I wall hold you in my arms some way,

I give my oath to moon in the night sky,

The fabrics of time shall bend to our love,

I will hold in my arms again before I die.

 

I vow to stars shining so high above,

To look into eyes of any God,

To once again hold you my love,

 

I will never be without you,

You have my vow, mark my words,

Our love was destined to be true.

Reviews

[R.M.C]

Another emotional piece portraying the hearts desires. Your ways of describing the commitment of true loves is very touching and warming - it really does make you believe in true love yourself. There are a few small mistakes that you should correct (though overall, the poem is perfect in my eyes):
8th line: I will hold on to you even through the next life.
18th line: I will hold you in my arms some way.
19th line: I give my oath to the moon in the night sky.
21st line: I will hold you in my arms again before I die.
22nd line: I vow to the stars shining so high above.

I know that for the 19th and the 22nd lines, you may not like the sound of it with 'the' but you could put 'unto' in its place - that sounds better and I think it suits your poem better :) hope I've been helpful...