Untold Secrets

Alone with all these secrets;

I've hidden them in my shell.

You have questions, I hold answers;

and I've taken them down to hell.

I know things that you don't know;

things that you desire.

I ask of you: Come join me here;

your calm will soothe the fire.

Inside, you know you want to hear;

the things I have to say.

So come, quickly take your life;

and travel down to where I lay.

I am here, with these secrets;

waiting, where feared souls flee.

I am here, with these secrets;

so come join hell with me.

Reviews

[Green]

I'm going to get the nit-picky part over with first:
here should of been hear at one point
and you're missing an I at and travel down to where lay. It looks like you meant to put it there and you just missed the key or something. It happens to me all the time.
Now for the fun part:
I really enjoyed this. It was kind of a narrative but not. I liked how it was kind of dark and mysterious, never quite giving away what those secrets are. Who knows, whenever they finally get them they may find out they weren't really worth having.
Good write.

[Vivi]

Thanks. I enjoyed the criticism, it was good. And thank you for the comments. It will help!!