failed.

She wanted to dance,

but there was no music.

she wanted to sing,

but she had no voice.

she wanted to feel,

but she had no senses.

she wanted to fly,

but she had no wings.

she wanted to love,

but she had no heart.

she wanted to die,

so she sat down and cried.

she wanted to sleep,

but she could not dream,

she wanted to wake up,

but she never did.

she wanted to escape..

but she realized..

she couldnt` run from herself.

Author's Note

"ellie, ellie, ellie....just what are you thinking about today??"..**shakes head**
idk why wrote this..just another of my minds, "brilliant", creations...eh?? chyea right...idk..i thought it was pretty good, kinda not ryhiming, but what really matters is that i put a little bit of myself int this "poem", right?? so..it`s all good...umm..any comments?? suggestions?? ANYTHING IS GOLDEN!! thanks..<3

Reviews

[ebur™]

Interesting piece, and I felt like I could relate to it. The rhythm was very good as well as the flow. Loved the phrases you used.

[..R.I.P..]

I love it, especially the last few lines. Great job.

[Jemma]

I love it.
I can relate to the feeling.
Failing without even starting.
The last line "she couldn't run from herself"
Is very real. Love it.

Can't really get what I mean out of my head and into this comment.
Just thought it was great.

[Looouise]

I thought that this was really good
:]
I liked it
especially the last couple of sentences

[Last Lying Look]

This reminds me of that Dr.Suess quote "Everywhere you go--- there you are!"
This is an excellent piece.
I love the concept of it.
Great work!
-Elissa

[Destiny]

hmmmmm. this is very interesting. I like the poem. I think that it's one that can be taken on to surface, but if you sat and though about it, it could be so much more. Kinda like the gift that keeps on giving. Very nice
Thanx for writing.
♥Destiny♥

[Ian]

It's short but I liked it. It has a good rhythm. Keep writting!

[Almost Alive]

Woah, all these kinds of feelings... I got an idea for a writing by reading this but I just remember Circa Survive already has a song for what I was thinking of x_x

A poem does not really have to rhyme to be beautiful. Great job.

[Nik Dendera]

Honestly brutal and full of emotive thinking.

Really well written and beautifully worded. An excellent piece!

[shane]

heya nice poem i would say more and explain why ilike ...but unfortunatley i never could explain myself so it'll have to be enough just to say i like it :D