Amidst The Slow Pain

I made this poem because i was really depressed of my dog dying from cancer. For some reason, it doesnt with that at all! -.-

Amidst in the slow pain
I holler your name
Deep inside
There is no second goodbyes
I laid there
Your eyes caught me here
You left me alone
No longer i can hold
I saw your infinite smirk
My heart shattered by a dirk
My tears shed liquid
Can you make this quick?
I laid there once again
By myself, not you, instead
I felt hurt and betrayed
Like a lion that broken its cage
Firey anger raged
I grabbed my pistol and raised
at you, I said and frowned,
"Will I be seeing you in around?"
You shifted your feet
"I dont believ-"
I scrambled my gaze
"Why are you in a daze?"
I cried,
"Why are you acting this way?!"
"Don't you see,
you dont love me."
I looked into your hazel eyes
"I loved you all this time!
Why don't u realize?!"
The gun still in hand
You flunged at me like a rubber band
I fell into a backward flip
You landed at my hip
You groped my hand in sweat
"I loved you too ever since we met."
We hugged and cried
together we became tied
Suddenly, I pressed my hand against your chest
It was blood nonetheless
The pistol went off
because we were soft
the slow pain we bled
because i knew we were going to be dead.

Reviews

[Admiral Kirk]

I can feel every emotion put into this poem; very well-thought-out and ingeniously written.

[deeps]

Wow! or should I say Ow!
This is ownderful, I can really feel this write.
amazing, I like the layout of this as well.
Wonderful flow of words.