Free

Meh...another old poem

 

 

Free

 

I wanted to be happy,

I wished to feel joy and glee,

But I could only feel this way,

If I were free.

 

Without freedom there are only chains,

Binding me to the ground,

And with these chains comes sorrow,

Thus in sorrow I shall drown.

 

But once I've drowned,

What is next?

Heaven or is it Hell?

The answer is neither for all I'll do is rot inside a corpsy shell.

 

From Light to Dark,

From Life to Death,

All in the blink of an eye,

Everything I know shall end because I could not fly.

 

But what would happen if I were free,

If only I weren't tied down,

I'd still be here with such life and cheer,

 And there'd be nothing to fear.

 

For with this freedom,

I gain peace,

For myself and all the rest.

 

But sadly my freedom is gone,

And it didn't take long,

For me to fall,

Bound by the chains in my chest.

Reviews

[Lynx]

This is very nice. Short, easy to read yet the message goes through really well. Quite typical/cliche in the way that too many writers write about this these days, but I see the need to actually write these poems. It is a way to release your emotions and I find this really beautiful to say the least, I can feel your pain through the heavy atmosphere this poem gives.

[K. A. Stone]

Beautiful. The language, the simplicity yet complex feel of the message, the flow. I adore it.

[Sheila Marie Carr]

Such an amazing poem, the message is so true to be free is everything but in the end I often wonder if we are ever truly free. " but what will happen if I were free" thats the question, freedom means so much to some and so little to other's.

[just is]

This is a most excellent write and very profound,

For with this freedom,
I gain peace,
For myself and all the rest.

But sadly my freedom is gone,
And it didn't take long,
For me to fall,
Bound by the chains in my chest.

Awesome ending here, like this

[Philosophile. (Maddy)]

Excellent poem. The flow here is nice, and I could vividly visualize the images you gave me. "Without freedom there are only chains
Binding me to the ground,
And with these chains comes sorrow,
Thus in sorrow I shall drown."
I loved this!

[Thief Lord Alex]

I really enjoyed reading this, you managed to strike a chord in me. "Thus in sorrow I shall drown." I've been there and no matter what happens that sorrow won't last forever. Here's to hoping you can gain some freedom.

-Alex

[Rhine Wolf]

Wow!! so profound!!! brilliant! the flow, the word choice, everything was just soooo good. your references

"From Light to Dark,
From Life to Death,"

you make it sound as if you are trapped in a relationship that you cant out of.

Blessed be!
Fallon