The Life of a Snowflake

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The Life of a Snowflake

Born by the freezing of water

The life starts, within a cloud

Hundreds of feet up it begins its journey

Falling so lifelessly.....

Spinning out of control

Drifting in the wind

Falling falling

Until it reaches the softly coated ground

 A new soldier in the army of snow

This is the end of its journey

This is the death of a snowflake

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

CJ, I don't know how many times I sat as a child and tried to catch a snowflake in my hand. It would always melt away and I remember thinking that I had killed the little snowflake my trying to catch it. Your poem brought back all those memories of long ago. I won't tell you how long that has been, but it has been many years. I can still see myself at the age of five frowing at that little wet spot on my finger. You have done a really great job with this piece.


A new soldier in the army of snow

This is the end of its journey

This is the death of a snowflake


Thanks for giving me a little glimpse into my childhood.

[Simplistic Complication]

i love this one. falling so lifelessly. i like that line. well anyways, good work :)

[Fear Corrupts!]

Aww, poor little trooper.

[Ravenskald]

simple beautiful and complete, there's some nice phrasing in this and some good ideas so I'm just going to moan about wanting it to be longer (grin.)
~Raven

[Last Lying Look]

This was neat.
Great job! :)

[PureAbstrakt]

Like looking through the magnifying glass at something that usually goes unnoticed...I almost wish the falling lasted longer...

[Tomás Ó C..]

Yes, a glorios death in the downward charge to its doom... as a corpse rots... a snowflake melts...

[Valentine]

Very true..short and right to the point..God bless..Valentine

[Tammy]

I like this piece, very poetic....

[QuietPoet]

Nature I think is always something you can write about because simply you can see it everyday. This was beautiful. Keep writing.