Oubliette

A friend and her kids are getting a raw deal from a family member - this is how I dealt with it.

This place of truest forgetting,

where malefactor banishes kin,

brutally efficient with sadistic glee,

sadists do weep at your skill,

with effortless application of dark crafts.

The walls of this oubliette thick,

yet lacking of fabric that embraces,

shadowed pains and echoing agony,

as you punish the young to the dank,

looking to all a dull reflection of yourself.

The outrage you express for naught,

pain hurled to draw others into the void,

created of  the loss to push away more,

with claim of nobility to dungeon true,

welcome to your desolate depravity.

Sight set upon flow to escape vile cage,

as youth sinks into despair you've weaved,

pleasure you've gained chiseled upon visage,

to risk loss of legacy over a childish rage,

tearing apart rather than esteemed you hold.

Sensitive souls dimmed by your hierarchy,

a long division between your familial ties,

no appeasement sates your hateful hunger,

cutting deep the corners with indifference,

Lashing out just to break the fairer silence.

Timid not the cut to be received upon chest,

as heartstrings are severed in equal measure,

your sorrows will by thy own to drown in,

lacking prisoners for oubliette you crafted,

fitting your blackened heart with elated solace.

Reviews

[Dark Heart of Winter]

Very poetic way of expressing poisoned family relations :D and i love how it peeks into the motivations behind people who hurt most the ones closest to them; the blind, desperate groping to fill the hole in their heart by bringing others down.

I meant to make my poem 'mother' like this but somehow it just kept turning into a (cathartic) rant. :P

[Wynter Ignatius]

Another one along this this line is my poem "Crucifixation" or even "Matron"

As the person I wrote this for would say, writers tend to respond to things differently than others and since I can not change the situation directly, I wrote about it to ease my own feelings about it.

She needs out of this quickly and plans are in motion.

Thanks for the review my friend.

[Dark Heart of Winter]

I hope she gets out quickly :)

[Shaquana Adams]

Such admirable skill shown here. Family matters, but sometimes they can be awful. Nicely penned :)

-QuanaWana

[Sami Khalil]

Families have their ups and downs. It is very important to develope an approach to solving problems. Poison can be treated with love and kindness in these manners...Bravo sir on an outstanding poem...:)....................

[Wynter Ignatius]

Thank you Sami - when I can't help those closest to me, I write to deal with the issue.

[Sami Khalil]

Yep. You are welcome...:).........................