Dying Inside

Recent comments prompted this.

Dying on the inside

Decay

Wither

Atrophy

Air and water

Nourshment and light

Absent or running out

As the caged pot

Holding heart

Aches of release

No longer stable

Wanton of

It's own demise

Yet each beat

Takes its toll

Brining pain

To show you life

Striking it's chord

Will all this necrosis

A seed is growing

Fertilized wholy

By the past

So let time pass

Breathe and rest

As this grows

Filling the void

Life from death

Cry if you need

Just don't salt

The greenhouse inside

As fallow fields will

Birth beautiful flowers

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

An amazing write. You weave words with talent and strike hearts with precision. The ending two lines were out of this world...:)............

[Wynter Ignatius]

I have been told my endings often are what seals the deal with many readers. Thanks you for the review and kind words.

[Sami Khalil]

I agree. You are welcome...:).........................

[W. C. Forrest]

Life and death, loss and gain, past and future; the poem dwells on everything and flows very smoothly. Beautiful imagery. Choice of words elegant and precise.

[Wynter Ignatius]

Thank you - I see myself as raw so it is good to hear that I am moving others.

[Shaquana Adams]

Dying on the inside
Decay
Wither
Atrophy
Air and water
Nourshment and light
Absent or running out

Very impacting word play and imagery. Great write :)

[Wynter Ignatius]

Thank you Shaquana - something random I put together yet people like it a lot. Going to go with my gut more often.

[Dark Heart of Winter]

I think this is about the strength you get when u come out of a severe depression...am i right?

I simply love the imagery. :)

[Wynter Ignatius]

Partially, but then again if you get that out of it I am not one to judge - a hundred people will see a hundred different things and feel an equal number of different things. I write to move people, but it is also cathartic to me - pictures of the past painted in words for release or to hold onto a memory.

Glad you enjoyed this quick response to the pains of others.

[Alex Ryder]

Nice poem, quite interesting. Good job.

[Wynter Ignatius]

Thanks - reaction to a post I saw and I ran with it.