Tangets

More dealing with random emotions and thoughts.

Should I feel pain inside?
Should I feel anything at all?
Should I care about moving on?
Should I care about the lies?

Could have been more helpful
Could have worked for more money
Could have had contact everyday
Could have just walked away like you

Would have given you my all
Would have been there, thick or thin
Would have loved to wake beside you
Would have loved to be your one

Reviews

[Alex Ryder]

I like your use of repetition. Should, could, would...it brings to mind the old refrain of "could've, should've, would've. Was this intentional? Either way, good job. Yet again, your last line wraps everything up quite nicely- you have a gift for endings!

[Wynter Ignatius]

I often write in a disjointed way like you have commented before - I take that as a complement to be quite honest as my thoughts an emotions sometimes wax and wane without much structure or control on my part.

If I see a pattern though, I test myself to keep it going and see what I can come up with. Things like this, while not the original intent of the thoughts and emotions I wanted to express tend to reach people better than I would have thought.

Thanks again for the review.

[Alex Ryder]

I often do the same thing with patterns. Casual Conversation, the poem where every line started with the letter C, was originally a coincidence. Then I noticed the pattern. And you're welcome for the review- it's my pleasure. You are a gifted writer.

[Wynter Ignatius]

Thank you and you are as well - It has been a pleasure to meet another talented writer that doesn't hold back much if anything at all.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Would have loved to be your one
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Would have loved to be your only...

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Just a thought..,.
if we had the answers laid before us...
the perfect relationship...
I guess we would not be writing this verse...
yet as with a bond...they mend and heal...
and revive back to life...
if they are meant to be...

[Wynter Ignatius]

I have issue with the word "perfect;" I see it as unobtainable in life as all things have flaws. That said I have found at least one person who despite all her flaws (of which too I have many) is worthy of a lifetime of joy.

I just hope she finds it.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Perfect like the commercials...are only 99.99 percent effective...hehehe