But A Whisper

I needed to get this out.

Unsure and insecure mind

Hands steady only from weight

No vision of language unspoken

Smiles in the corners of your eyes

Frown that quickly glances to laughter

Repentance thick upon your face

No tone or pause in your voice

Inflections of highs and lows in metered timing

I want it all though I'll take


But a whisper


See with these eyes every movement

Hear with these ears every little sound

Spoken in silent gestures so plain

Screaming words trapped behind your lips

Vibrato of chorus left unspoken

But I ask too much of you

Not my place to ask for


But a whisper


Siting on my hands to keep still

Passing time pulls in varied gravity

Washes of equal warmth and chills

Heart beats slow and quicken equally with


But a whisper


Even though I shouldn't have it

Dreams to suit expectations of desire

Not knowing a single thing


But a whisper

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

Through your whispers she heard your single thing, through your expectations she shared her desire ring. Excellent...:)......

[Wynter Ignatius]

I have yet to hear her whisper yet she is happy so I can not ask for anything more.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. You are welcome...:)...............

[Glen Yumang Manese]

The breakup of this with the repeating line:

But a whisper...

gives the reader time to develop into the stanzas...
and I believe was your intent...
by the way this goes about in its entirety...

[Wynter Ignatius]

Yes Glen, I sonetimes find repetition of a line can tie it all together like lyrics to a song.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

I do that with my Filipino American Dream Series...a harder write for me...since I take a different view from what I am usually use to doing...but challenges me to do what I would otherwise not...

[Wynter Ignatius]

I hopefully will be able to get more of my works up Monday as well as take a look at yours - on my phone right now so navigation is not the greatest.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Understandable...no hurry...most of my stuff is being revamped...just what's on my main page is open...the rest is closed for now...