Loss

A sad poem about the loss of love and dealing with abroken heart

Loss

I wipe these tears from my tired eyes...I sit and stare at the place you used to be...
And wonder to myself, why me.
You pace the floor in your ghostly form, like a whisper of wind, you are whisked away...
And I wonder to myself..What have I done now?
I havent lost you yet but your gone...
In my bed you sleep, but it's still empty and cold.
I havent lost you yet , but your gone...
And Im so alone.
The world passes me by, like a tidal wave ready to drown me..
I reach for your hand to anchor me...But reach emptiness instead...
I havent lost you yet but your gone...
And I sigh into the night to save me...
But...Im alone with your kiss, warm on my lips...yet cold in my heart and I cry.

 

Reviews

[Kathryn]

Nice piece, very lyrical. If you play an instrument, you should set it to music.

I did notice a few grammatical errors though. I went ahead and fixed them in brackets, if you don't mind:

I wipe these tears from my tired eyes...
I sit and stare at the place you used to be...
And wonder to myself, why me[?]
You pace the floor in your ghostly form,
[Like] a whisper of wind, you are whisked away...
And I wonder to myself[, w]hat have I done now?
I [haven't] lost you yet but [you're] gone...
In my bed you sleep, but it's still empty and cold.
I [haven't] lost you yet , but [you're] gone...
And [I'm] so alone.
The world passes me by, like a tidal wave ready to drown me..
I reach for your hand to anchor me...
But reach emptiness instead...
I [haven't] lost you yet but [you're] gone...
And I sigh into the night to save me...
But [I'm] alone with your kiss, warm on my lips...
[Y]et cold in my heart and I cry.

[Hopeless Desire]

this is deep/ sounds like lyrics

[Phenomena]

very heartfelt:) You repeated yourself a little, but you managed to make the poem flow. Nice Work!:)
God Bless:)

[Shadow Writer]

A sad poem, love sometimes isn't kind. I could feel the emotions and pain of love. Well written piece. Phantom...