Secrets and Shadows

In the darkest of night

Quiet is the nite....and dark,
the mist swirls n floats upon the gentle wind
the sound as soft as a murmur, Hush.....

Time holds its breath..waiting...waiting
a shadow scurries threw the nite and is gone
who is there? no one, Hush.....

~Wycked~
 

Author's Note

Discussion welcome

Reviews

[Bruce Bray]

i love this..
the reader can imagine so many things while reading this..
it could be romantic, it could be scary, it could be a number of things..

so illustrative..

[Veralily]

Few words can sometimes say the most. That's what you did. Well done!

~Veralily

[Elzereth]

Wonderful job, my friend. So much said in so few words. I love the suspense that is built and is maintained even in the end.
Who IS there? Is there truly no one? A mouse scurrying perhaps? The wind? We will never know.
I love it. Keep up the good work!

[Angelic Darkness]

In the night there is always something there;).
This poem had suspense of subtle playing of words...
made you feel like you were all alone in the dark, yet
the feeling you were not. Good job...AD

[Wildecat]

Kudos my dear another excellent write.

[Legion]

Shhhh! I'm moving through the darkness. Don't look. But you can feel. Haunting. Very haunting. Kudos.

[Twilight]

You have managed to create such an atmosphere, and with so few words!

"who is there? no one". These words could be reminding the reader how our minds sometimes play tricks on us, when lost in darkness.

Good writing, Wycked!

[Rebecca Rogers]

This is so mysterious. The first few lines are great!

Nice work! :)

[Sean M. Addams]

very nice visual piece... short but really sticks in your mind.... fav lines........Quiet is the nite....and dark,
the mist swirls n floats upon the gentle wind
the sound as soft as a murmur, Hush.....
.....................nice job on this...

[celyn]

I like the rushed sort of soft mystery to this.
Nice work.