Masticated Memories

Something I just wrote.

Putrid stains crawl across the floor
I hold my breath and wish it away
But I cannot undo my sins

Slowly the searing stench of mutilation
Wraps itself around my lungs and tugs
Pulling me down to the damp carpet
Forcing my face into the mess I have made

Horrified I try to stand and run away
My bones become brittle, muscles meek
I try to scream, but my tongue freezes
Encased in concrete I am defenseless

The ceiling above me remains calm
Motionless, a boring white
So passive it's threating
Trying to lure me into a false state of security

These bodies next to me
They watch me
Their eyes have been torn from their skulls
Their mouths hang open
Their flesh riddled with sores
This is all my doing

The invisible voices subside
My mind clears
Looking at the ceiling I take a deep breath
My vision comes back into focus
The ceiling fan returns to its normal state
No longer leaving vapor trails behind it
I look around, searching for the corpses
But I see none
The ground is bare, except for some s**t
The stain that I am
I have raped my innocence
Masticated it beyond recognition
Now I yearn to experience it again
But it's just a graveyard now
Rotting corpses
Wonderful memories
Painful
I reach for them
But they fall to dust in my hands

Reviews

[No Longer Writing Here]

Getting inside the head of a killer is always good reading. Their life through their eyes is often overlooked. Great imagery throughout the poem.

[Doctor Deathstab]

I think it's a fine look into the mind of someone demented. I actually got a warm feeling in my chest while reading this poem. The big problem with people who write darker poetry is that a lot of it sounds so forced, but this was pretty smooth.

[jessfoundwonder]

This is scarry as hell. Really detailed, maybe even too detailed, ha, just kidding. It's good, not really my flavor or morbid, but I liked it all the same.

[Flow~]

I love the style of this poem it was writen very well! I know if we hold our sins in it will make us sick maybe thats why they have confessions so we can ease our souls as our sins can torment us. What a wonderful write this was! I really enjoyed it.

[Tracie Skarbo]

This is amazing! Such vivid detail, you leave nothing to chance. Very strong writing style. Something I like to see.

This is my favorite line: The stain that I am

Well done. I will be looking for more from you.

Tigra

[Kelley]

Ok I agree with Katchzen that was some scary s**t lol
I do like your writing style and I'm glad I was asked to
come read.

Great write! Thanks for sharing.

Kelley

[Katchzen]

Wow. Now *that* was a scary poem, and very deep.

[Jinx's Heart]

Wow! It almost feels like there's a certain depth that is being hidden within the context. The pain and seemingly loneliness is very profound. This is very touching and almost painful to read, but I love it! Awesome talent! :)

[Rachel]

Wow. Very vivid imagery. I felt the pain of the speaker as I read. Nice job!