Dear Santa, Where's My Answer?

Something I wrote for Flame DM's "Dear Santa" contest.

 Dear Santa,

 

Ever since I finally opened my eyes and my mind

I've been wondering if you're truly alive

A simple response to this letter would solidify

My dwindling faith in the decency of the human race

 

But I'm not quite sure if you can salvage me

Depression and apathy riddle me like HIV

I'm a cynic and I admit it, there's no denying this

Within the purest of souls there's the darkest of black holes

 

Where the snow stretches for miles on an eternal plane

There is only a house and a workshop in this beautiful place

St. Nick, how often do you check up on the elves' progress

Or inspect their non-existant welfare, it's not fair

 

I know the world's a b***h, this is obviously apparent

In the wars that we rage spawned by ignorance and hatred

I just don't understand how you give away presents

To everybody else while your elves live in hell

 

Working every single day of the year, their fingers sliced

Splintered and broken like their will to survive

While you warm yourself by the fire with your loving wife

How can I respect a man who's caused this kind of life

 

The concept of giving away presents for free

Sounds great and wonderful but there's one thing

When people don't have to work they get lazy

And eventually society starts disintegrating

 

Thank you for actually reading this entire letter

If you're even alive, or maybe this is burning in a fire

Helping to warm freezing hands in this vicious winter

In the end I just hope things only get better

 

P.S. Santa, can I have double-layered sweater?

Author's Note

I totally made the image for this poem :D

Reviews

[Bethany Woody]

I've seen the style before, but I don't think I've come across a piece to Santa before. The subject matter, the crappy state of the world, seems more a topic for some higher being(God, whoever you believe in) then Santa. But it was a contest called Dear Santa...
I couldn't help but draw some comparisons between the state of the elves' lives with how some thing are in the US. MAinly there health care issues. Maybe I'm reading too much into it.......
It's a good write, I enjoyed reading it. While I think it has a bit of a political bent, it wasn't push.

[Wildecat]

This is an awesome poem, and as you said if when people get things for free they do tend to become lazy. Nice write. And thanks for the kind comments and prayers for my Friend( Dawn Marie Davis)

[Sianna Reader]

Awesome! This was so creative and had me really laughing. I liked the P.S at the end too, it kind of rounded the poem off and the image you created of the elves was comical. Loved this. x

[~IlOvEcHrIsToPhErBuRnEt..]

That was funny, it kind of threw me off a bit because ive never read something like this before. I like it though. It's very creative. Thanks for your review.

[luke312]

This was awesome man feel to proud Santa Sucks He Ow Me

[J.Black]

I hope you win, this is awesome! I as well am writing one for Flame DM's contest.

Hehe but of course mine will be better, muhahahaahaha - , takes a breath, hahahahaha!


"I know the world's a b***h, this is obviously apparent
In the wars that we rage spawned by ignorance and hatred
I just don't understand how you give away presents
To everybody else while your elves live in hell"

[Flame DM]

Love it! Shows the real world drama while shooting down the fantasy. Child working laws flashed in my mind reading about the elves, and then there was communism. Amazingly done and the end made me laugh. Bash the hell out of the fat jolly man then ask for something XD! loved reading this! I'm gonna add it to my favorites!

Flame

[ATG]

This was an interesting poem. I liked the points you made in it. We humans are not too great. We start wars over petty things. This was a great poem. Very interesting and well written.