Whispers

One of my first poems

Whispers, just whispers, was it the wind,
Sweet breezes blow by me, where has she been,
Memories, fond memories, chased by the pain,
Voices that whisper she’s gone, again.
Lonely, just lonely, left all alone,
Moonlit shadows, heart turns to stone,
Sorrows, deep sorrows, burden the soul,
Regret and despair, claim their toll.
A moment, one moment, what did I hear?
Was it the wind, whisper she’s near?
Falling, I’m falling, into the past,
She’ll not return forever, at last.
Leaving, I’m leaving, time to move on,
Misty last memories, I’m finally done.
Breezes, sweet breezes, on new morning dew,
The wind carries her whispers,
"I’ll always love you

Reviews

[MCS]

Those whispers usually appear at the most inopportune moments. Well done dear poet.

[Trace]

I dont know about you, but whispers usually lead to many interesting and unforseen experiences. read moreI dont know about you, but whispers usually lead to many interesting and unforseen experiences.
Thank you so very much for reading my work and compliments.

Huggs, Trace

[MCS]

I couldn’t agree more; one just needs to be receptive :)

[Trace]

Exactly. He whispered...

[Coyote Poetry]

Those whispers can steal our thoughts.
"Was it the wind, whisper she’s near?
Falling, I’m falling, into the past,
She’ll not return forever, at last."
I tell people. The past will always catch us. Better to walk softly and hope for a safe place to rest. Thank you Trace for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Trace]

Thank you my friend for your wonderful compliments and thoughts on this poem.

Trace

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Trace.

[nj coleman]

Love the repeating phrases every other line. The cadence is captivating. A sad, sorrowful poem. And I like that. Very well done!

[Trace]

Thank you so very much for your wonderful comments and compliments on this poem.

Trace

[Jenny Lee]

Just filling in blanks, love.

[Trace]

Written about a past relationship, .any yesrs ago when it was finally time to move on, she contacted me.

[Jenny Lee]

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5 posted 2008-09-17 03:34 PM

Thank you so much for your kind words. This poem was inspired by the love of my Father and Mother in law. She passed away just 2 months ago. 3 other poems of mine were inspired by them they were together 44 years. Please check "Eternal Devotion, Wilted on the vine and First there were Two.
Let me know what you think. Theirs was an unbelievably true love.

[Jenny Lee]

WHISPERS by Trace. It's just written with so much emotion and anxiety. I think maybe Trace is in denial of the true meaning. There's a LOT of PAIN in this one, love.

[Jenny Lee]

The metre' is PERFECT!

[Trace]

Thank you for the research.
I am. Surprised at what you found that l had forgotten. I need to go find that site again

[Jenny Lee]

@ Trace https://www.piptalk.com/forums/view/106/1358

[Brandy]

When emotions such as these drift through the wind, and a whisper escapes, it is so painful to embrace. Oh, my ! This is deep and moving.

[Trace]

I cant remember how long ago l wrote this piece, l have hundreds of poems in my computer that l decided to start posting.
Thank you for your wonderful comments and compliments on this poem.

Trace

[Desert Knave]

I like the repetition in the alternating lines here, really makes it read nicely when spoken aloud. ~Jim

[Trace]

Thank you for your wonderful comments and compliments Jim. I appreciate your reading my work.
read moreThank you for your wonderful comments and compliments Jim. I appreciate your reading my work.

Trace

[Jenny Lee]

Absolutely! The repeating of words is what got "me" Mr Trace! They just resonated in my soul! Oh God! I just LOVE you! My favorite poet of all time!

[Poetic Beauty]

The whispers of the wind many times can not be trusted. It whispers secret of the past and the future but rarely speaking clearly with real intention. Heartfelt and solemn. The pain of love departed is a different kind of tortured

[Trace]

Thank you so much for reading and commenting on this poem, your compliments are always appreciated.

Trace