Mansion on the Hill

a love story

Mansion on the Hill

 

Whispering breezes blow gently

Through empty windows every night

Songbirds proclaim the morning

As they carelessly take flight

 

Years and years of toil

Working well past his prime

Giving all he had to offer

While they abused his time

 

But unbeknownst to most

He had carefully devised a plan

Of where he wished to retire

And one day he acquired the land

 

Miles and miles from nowhere

In the mountains of his dreams

Every weekend you could find him

Building his mansion by the stream

 

She forgave his fishing weekends

When he said he needed to unwind

For his job was so demanding

Though she worried where he spent his time

 

Then on the day he said goodbye

To the job he had held so long

He took his wife of fifty years

To her surprise he’d been working on

 

They drove and drove for hours

Then turned his old truck up the tiny road

He’d hauled in so many supplies before

But now she was his final load

 

For when he parked beside the stream

He said: “This is the mansion I’ve built for two

She took his hand as they crossed the bridge

With teary eyes she said: “I love you”

 

Whispering breezes blow gently

Through glowing windows even still

The songbirds proclaim the mornings

Round their mansion on the hill.

Reviews

[emmajoygreen]

You really have written a love story, each phrase a brick for your wonderfully conceived plan. Yours must be a faithful mind, one that at the very least needs to display and prove that emotions are to be shared with the likes of Tinkerbell who loses if the world decrees otherwise. Love lives here!

[Trace]

Thank you so very much for your wonderful comments and compliments on my work.
I truly enjoy telling a story with poetry.
If you know the poet "Robert W.Service, you might recognize the patterns. (THE CREMATION OF SAM MCGEE) I grew up reading him. Thank you again.

Trace.

[Trace]

You might also enjoy "Weathered Wood"

[Sami Khalil]

A beautiful and touching story_ poem combo. Heartfelt and gentle with a happy ending.
Good job sir.

[Trace]

Thank you Sami. Good to see you seeing me.
Have a blessed Thanksgiving.
Trace

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure. You do the same. Good to see you still around.

[lessa (kenzie)]

Such a wonderful and beautiful write, very sincere write as well. nicely expressed

[Trace]

Thank you so very much for your wonderful comments and compliments.

Hope you have a blessed Thanksgiving.

Trace

[Kerra]

Wow, this is amazing. Ever so beautiful. Very poetic

[Trace]

Thank you so much for reading and commenting on my poem.
Your compliments are greatly appreciated.
Have a blessed Thanksgiving.

Trace

[Azifwecare]

such a lovely story. The love of a hard working dedicated man is such a powerful thing to behold. What a blessed woman she is.

[Trace]

I love telling stories, and when i can put the in the form of a poem, it's even better.

read moreI love telling stories, and when i can put the in the form of a poem, it's even better.

Thank you for reading and commenting on this piece.

Trace

[Chris Shaw]

Beautiful love poem. All those years together while he toiled away on a secret home for the pair of them. An uplifting little read. Isn't love grand.

Chris

[Trace]

Thank you so very much for your wonderful comments and compliments on my work.

Trace.