Semi-Sweet

Drew plans a lovley dinner for Candy is expecting her...

It was a night with a full moon hanging in the sky like a sparkling disco ball on a thread.

 Drew was dressed in a tuxedo as black as the night, an apple red tie on the chest of the tux. He and candy were going to have a romantic candle lit dinner at his house. The table was set with homemade spaghetti bolognaise and meatballs. Red grape juice was poured into crystal wine glasses. Dessert was a massive three tiered chocolate cake with Hershey’s semi sweet choc chips in it. Strawberry and rose scented candles decorated the tables and gave of a wonderful aroma. The only thing missing now was Candy. Many hours passed and the arrival of Candy never happened.

 

“Ten o clock...” Drew groaned as he stared at the clock

“She said she’d be here at seven... I’ll try phoning her” he sighed and he picked up his I-phone and called her up. It rang, and rang, and rang until it stopped and this happened

“Hi you’ve reached Candy’s answer phone, please leave a message after the beep.” Was what Drew heard. A long beep followed and he left this message:

“Hi Candy, why didn’t you come, I’ve waited for you for hours! Please phone me back. Thanks...”

She never did phone back...

“I guess... Our love has withered... Just like the flower in my poem!” he sobbed and went onto his bed and cried himself to sleep...

Author's Note

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Reviews

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Oooooooh! What's going to happen now, awwww poor Drew that suuuuuuucks. Yeah you made me drool a little but no harm done a few grammar problems again:

“Ten o clock...” Drew groaned as he stared at the clock(.)

“She said she’d be here at seven... I’ll try phoning her” he sighed and he picked up his I-phone and called her up. It rang, and rang, and rang until it stopped and this happened(.)

Can't wait to see what happens next. :)

[Raven Starhawk]

Oh no. What happened? Hopefully everything will be all right between them. I feel bad for Drew.

[Vinod Kumar U K]

So sad... good flow and used simple words and totally imagination

[Wilfre Salem williams]

Poor drew