The Waking Eye

Something I created off the top of my head. I don't usually write in this type of rhyming scheme, but I decided to try something different. I hope you like it!

A silent sigh

From a waking eye

A longing cry

Drifting by

 

There's nothing to see

Here in front of me

All I want to be

Is free

 

I’ve waited since birth

To see such mirth

Come touch the earth

And measure it's worth

 

It shouldn’t be new

But yes, it’s true

The chance to renew

Begins with you

Author's Note

It's not very long, definitely shorter than what I'm used too, but that's okay :)

Reviews

[Jenny Nelson]

Catchy and to the point. Sometimes short and sweet makes a stronger impression than a lot of words. Nice!

[Gunny]

Awesome!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!I love it!! I hope you write more that was great.

[Sarah]

It's lovely! :D Your rhyming and meter were perfect & never sounded awkward or forced. I'm impressed with the second to last stanza in particular, as "birth" isn't exactly the easiest word to rhyme with - let alone three times! XD Great job with this! ^___^

[Seriana]

Awwww, that's pretty! I loved it. I like poems that all the verses of the stanza end with the same sound. Good job!