Reflection

Something I wish to do in the near future. In the meantime...

She just sat there,
On the long marble staircase,
Watching the rain,

Her mind lost in thoughts,
Her eyes staring into unheard oblivion,
Her fingers gently caressing,
Three small trophies in her lap,

Calm resonating music,
Soft earphones in her ears,
A large velvet hoodie draped over her head,
And a smile on her lips,

As the rain teased down her outstretched fingers,
Dropping into puddles at her feet,

“What a day” she thought to herself,
And smile once again.

Author's Note

This piece isnt what I normally write. It has a lot of blank and missing ideas and thoughts to it. But I suppose that one beauty of it. The reader can fill in those blanks with whatever they feel like at the moment and create their own meaning.
Haha my mood swings are really getting the better of me. Please tell me what you think. Thank you =]

Reviews

[Kiynteyh]

This is a lovely piece. All the blanks leave me dying for more though, and it's driving me nuts. >.<
Well done. :)

[hannah]

Beautifully written. Speaking out of personal experience, I know how it's like to feel pressure. Being an honor student is not easy. Pardon my language, but sometimes it's full of crap and rules that restrain you from acting normally. I know how expectations can tire a person as well.

Even though this poem is quiet short, it's straightforward and I like it. It's clear and expressive, some of the things a poem should have. It's simple but well written.

[Liverpoolfan]

This is what is called a poem. Not that other "incomplete story". Truely, this is beautiful. Your poems are fantastic.

[Bullet Soul]

I really like this! It reminds me of all the power that music holds. How, even on a rainy day, it can lift our spirits and put a smile on our faces. It helps us to see beauty in the world around us. Even if it's not what you normally write, it's pretty darn good! I really enjoyed this one. Great work!

[*~Kristy~*]

This is actually very very pretty... I love the way she is described... Made me think of myself, I mean it seriously reminded me of myself.. You shouldn't change it! Unless you add a little to it, it's really good right now. leaves plenty to the imagination. I really liked it!

[black.butterfly]

What I got from this poem is a person that stops walking at the end of the day, tired and wishing that earth would stop spinning for a while...i liked it.

[Aditya Unni]

smiled* once again.

[deeps]

I like this piece i thought it was very thought out. I like the imagery I got with this as well. This is very well written.