Come Away With Me

To run away and to learn life with one person

 

Come Away With Me

 

Come away with me,

Where the bright stars fill the night sky,

And we lay beneath, dew grass below our feet

 

Come away with me,

Where the sigh of ocean waves fill the summer air,

And we sit on velvet sand,

Watching the brilliance of the setting sun

 

Come away with me,

Where rainy mists cover hilltop peaks,

And we stand under an oak tree,

Our breaths melting into the wind

 

Come away with me,

Where floral pastures are soft beneath our bare toes,

And we run, carefree, to a place no one knows

 

Come away with me,

Where we dance to the music of our hearts,

Trapped in the happiness of our love

 

So why don’t you,

Hold my hand,

Don’t be afraid,

And…

Come away with me?

Author's Note

I wrote another poem =] Yes, I am shocked too since its not my forte. Albeit, its not that good. Suffering a bit of mixed emotions at the moment so... yeah. Cant make out the real reason behind these lines. But I suppose thats the best part about poems. Ideas are so deeply embeded in them, that you can never find out its true meaning. But I would love to hear what you think of it though.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful poem. Kind and easy to read. Offers of friendship are needed in this life.
Coyote

[Princess]

Yeah no kidding, not that good my butt!
I especially loved the color you added into the piece, as when describing the "bright sun" or something about velvet and all of that. I mean, they're not direct color references but in my opinion it adds a lot of vividness to the scenes you're describing, which really help paint the picture of what is being portrayed here. That's mainly what stood out to me, it was very unique in that way.
Also, I like how there seems to be several different meanings to the poem, where you can read it and it could have two completely different meanings both times. I don't know how to describe that other than fantastacci :]
Great poem!

[Liverpoolfan]

"Albeit, its not that good."
How DARE you?! lol
This is an insult to alot of other writers out there. This is... really good. Your writing is improving constantly. And I don't think it is feedback from other people on here, or critques like on chapteread, it's just.. you. You'd probably write like this anyway, regardless of the feedback. It's clear that your writing has matured, and your reaching into your untapped potential. Also, I'm not just talking about this particular poem. Reading through some of your older work, and comparing it to the new, underlines my point. But yes, I seem to have gone off track. Lets go back to this poem in particular:
Beautiful. You may have written the poem with mixed emotions, but the emotions that come out in the poem are quite clear and constant. I agree with you, ideas are "so deeply embeded in them". However, you can always find out some meaning in a poem. Even if it's not it's true meaning. Besides, what is the 'true meaning' of the poem? What the writer felt while writing it, or what the reader feels while reading it?
...hmm... that was actually quite a good line. I really should write that done somewhere. Oh well.
I think I'll just going to shut up now.

[Al Yerks]

WriterMe,
First I would like to say that I am very impressed with your ability to capture even your mixed emotions and put them to words. When I was your age, sorting out my feelings was out of the question, let alone the thought of giving them life on a page. I feel your romantic side in this piece, and I enjoy the emotions it evokes in me.
I encourage you to always run with your feelings and instinct. You will satisfy the hunger within, and touch the lives of those fortunate enough to experience your gifts as a writer, a woman, and a deeply caring human being.

Great job!

Al

[deeps]

So why don't you,
Hold my hand,
Don't be afraid,
And�Come away with me?

Love your ending,
This is a very beautiful write here.
I feel emotion in this as well
Very well written and expressed.

[bluessadmood]

What I think about it..its so lovely..the tender use of words,and the much emotions spread all over it
Come with me we ll share the stars and sky we lie beneath,wet grass below our feet
we will watch the setting sun..climb over hills stand under the trees,shaking in the wind
we will run and run so carefree to places we only know and dance to music we only hear
What can I say such lovely use of words,to create such lovely so special world..only for two
lovely write..