APOCALYPTIC SKIES

The earth's light extinguished like a wick at Seven

To hollowed earth stars were hurled

His anger grew wings and he thrashed against Heaven

Causing darkness and chaos to swirl...

His Angel, in horror, neath the shower of stars

Watched his wings crash against Heaven's gates

Her love, her Phoenix caused tribulation...

War

Fighting God for his Angel's fate

For The two had Intertwined now..

In a way that no one knew

How his tears left such stains now..

Cold obsidian colored hues..

on her heart as he fell down, landing safely in her arms

Where she pet his curly head now and she quelled his false alarm

Lay with me here on this dark night..

Pray the stars all realign

Long as we two still are left now,

Neath Apocalyptic Skies...

Author's Note

I see that this piece can come off a bit too cryptic, so this week it shall undergo a bit of editing, also to deepen and darken out the imagery.. which I would love to be as rich and visually dark as possible, apocalypse is a dark subject, so to speak, at least visually it should be.... A little explanation of the premise:
the piece itself is about a female angel and her human love who becomes angry at God because of her distance, as she worries for the state of his soul, and thrashes against Heaven in his anger, causing a cataclysmic fall of stars and some apocalyptic things to stir.... The piece is inspired... I hope this lends clarity to a more mystical work... :)

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I kinda disagree that this needs to be edited or explained to such a degree in your author's notes. I believe your message is a universal one that can be read by many different people in very different ways. We all have our various apocalyptic experiences in life, so there's no need to define that or walk it back or anything. You've given the reader a relatable path to walk & it will look different for each of us who walk it. I love a poem that does that. Your sensations of doom & gloom are well done, not too gloomy, but just threatening enuf to show how life can be a little punishing at times!

[M. L. F.]

Thanks barleygirl.. ;) Much appreciated! And yes.. it can be. I think.you and I have a lot more in common than you know.. :)

[Bodine]

I agree with barleygirl that you don't have to edit it IN THE SLIGHTEST if you don't want to, nor do you need to listen to (or even receive) suggestions, advice or comments.
And/but!: I'll (maybe), not quite as much as she did, tell you not to edit it if you want to.It's your poem!
If you do revise it, though, I'm (or I would be) looking forward to reading your revised version!

[M. L. F.]

DAWWW.... Thanks ;) :) She / you are right.. I plan to leave it as is, until one day I decide it is not perfect anymore... ( which I am prone to do ) :~
Truly,
..Misty

[emipoemi]

......in truth, let me be the third to disuade you. You don't need to edit this at all (regardless even what your future self might say). The story is clear if you really think about it. That's what this poem does: makes you think, and that's what makes it so good! You really tell a good mystical tale about the battle between mortal and deity! Well done!

[M. L. F.]

Thank you.. :)

[.]

Certainly very apocalyptic in tone and expression!

A rather different poem than i usually read from you; this one has multiple tones. What appeared to be a poem about the end of the world, took on biblical and mythological proportion and concluded with a sensual, loving image of an angel and his loved one embracing beneath these apocalyptic skies, hoping that their love may just halt the advance of the coming doom.

This is very much an idea i can see has been inspired by the apocalyptic works of Mr. S. King. And 2017 brings us The Dark Tower!!!

Another fine write, Misty. Full of wonderful images and well written as always.

[M. L. F.]

Thank you Doodley. I thought you might appreciate the tones of this piece, with your global / mystical views.. I find these topics also fascinating but am just starting to explore them in my pieces. Fun themes to work with... all things epic and such..
Thank you for the read Doodley..
..Misty

[Ian Craven]

Nice work. You may not have used so much imagery, but you captured the feeling.

[M. L. F.]

Thank you... some rough edits left to do to enrich the piece, but yes.. Glad you enjoyed it..

[Lovecraft]

Very nice, although I would have inserted more destructive imagery and avoided the Bible stuff. The Phoenix was a beautiful touch. Death and Rebirth, arising from its own ashes...
Great Title

I'm actually quite fond of Post-Apocalyptic fiction and video games.

[M. L. F.]

Yeah.. I own "The Last of Us" And used to watch the walking dead.. tho I am not really a series fan... too predictable for my intuition and frankly most are played and cheesy... Movies, novels.. poetry.. novels.... Stephen King, Anne Rice, Peter Straub, Richard Matheson... Hell House / I am Legend... That's where it's at for me.. I am fascinated though with apocalyptic themes in writing etc.. the imagery alone is something that fuels me... You can see it in the images I choose for my work... I am into Epic... all things Epic.. and the bible fascinates me too... wanna talk Epic? lol.. Yeah.. thought about putting more destruction in this... you are spot on there... I will edit it and make it even more furious.... great idea..

[.]

The Stand......by The mercurial Stephen King!;)

[M. L. F.]

Yes.. Indeed. Classic stuff... Ever read Hell House... by Richard Matheson? Author of I Am Legend? Intense read..

[.]

I will check it out! Have "I am Legend" on the DVD shelf! Not sure if it did the book justice, though.

[M. L. F.]

I have not read I am Legend.... or seen the movie lol. I bet it's great though, the book. Hell House is insaneeee... like wow.. it's deep.

[Lovecraft]

If you want great apocalyptic imagery try playing Fallout 1 and Fallout 2. Though these games are almost 20 years old they are considered classics by many. You can only play them on PC and you can get them very cheap on GOG. God, I'm such a nerd, lol.

[M. L. F.]

My ex was obsessed with them... LOL... I loathe video games for the most part due to being with someone who was addicted basically lol... but I can see the fun in moderation... yeah. I like world of tanks ironically. And till you mention this.. I recall liking shooting up zombies in call of duty... they just keep coming.

[M. L. F.]

Also Fallout has a nice apocalyptic scene. Pretty cool, the old fifties bomb shelter look sort of shredded old street signs and desolation.

[Lovecraft]

Yes, I'm obsessed. But games are a great form of escapism. And if The Last of Us' story didn't impact you emotionally, you are a monster, lol.

[.]

Trying to download the pdf of "Hell House".....shhhhh. And yeah! I have taken a journey through Fallout. Absolutely murdered by deathclaws! Many, many times!

[Lovecraft]

I level up by killing loads of baby deathclaws. Use the combat shotgun or the sniper rifle.

[M. L. F.]

LOL... No monster here. I can't play it again though once it's beat meh. Books and movies yes.. repeatedly I can, but games no.

[Lovecraft]

I've beaten the game on hard about 7 times, lol.

[.]

Downloaded Hell house! Wooohoo!

[M. L. F.]

https://vk.com/doc219407793_383580993?hash=1202e7270702f82534&dl=204d849d26b848811c

[M. L. F.]

Hell house... be mentally prepared brotha.. It is psychologically troubling... Good writer though.. I really support his style... Read it in three days, well two nights... bah. Couldn't put it down..

[.]

Thanks for the link, Misty. I will let you know what i think. I hope there are no knives in this one! ;)

[Diamond]

This one is is truly amazing Misty and I can relate to the depth of emotions in this writing. I love the imagery and guess what...strong soul forces are often bestowed with apocalyptic skies so they can shine forth into the darkness and illuminate the universe. Beautiful work.

[M. L. F.]

Take the MBTI TEST.... it is the personality test universities use for career aptitude etc.. I heard once the FBI uses it.. it is scary accurate.... you will learn a lot about who and how you are and why... Not astrology or crap just pure personality traits.. a test made by Carl Jung... famed psychologist.. I'll send the link... I bet you are an idealist.. one of four like me.. there are sixteen types.. perhaps I SENSE that is why you get the depths and in between the lines meanings so deeply that I write... I think there will be a lot of "unicorns" rare type breeds here on WC as a lot of rare types are deep and mystical... deep thinkers and writers... just saying. Thank you as always for the read and the lovely review Queen! I would love to hear your results should you take the test! I am making a piece on it and linking the test site for people.. until then I will link it here for you....

http://www.humanmetrics.com/cgi-win/jtypes2.asp

[Diamond]

Bull's eye my dear Misty. I took the test and Yes, I am an idealist which I sure am. There is a quote, I guess it goes well with both of us "Any norm that can make you weak is dispensable". Fighters, aren't we? Love..
Queen.

[Diamond]

Thank you for the link :)

[M. L. F.]

Haha! NICE.... What was your combo? You don't have to tell here or at all just curious. I'm INFJ. :) Fin test huh? YOU are very welcome Queen..

[Diamond]

It's the same...INFJ. :))))

[M. L. F.]

Niceee!! I thought something like mine... Supposedly we are the most rare of the 16 types... comprising less than one percent of the world population.... Welcome to the unicorn club! LOL ...

[PhoenixDown]

How can anyone ask for more than this... Thank you DW,

-TheOneShePets

[PhoenixDown]

Absolutely love the picture, also..

[M. L. F.]

Aye.. It is a lovely bird..

[PhoenixDown]

Lovely and misunderstood, but sure..

[M. L. F.]

Trey...Stop..

[Jacob Clifford]

I absolutely love all the Biblical references within this poem. And as always, your work is wonderfully visual; each line played before my eyes. And that ending wasn't what I was expecting. So intimate, with a great tie-in with the title.