BREATHE WITH ME

 Shadows of Sunlight....
..a shroud on a ghost
    underneath the horizon..
A stone.
     The sun has gone down like a phoenix..
.... the rain drops..          
      ...I shiver..
                                    ...Breath trickles
                                     ...Down slow
  It slips..
to a pace no one yet comprehends
   ..unraveling all self control
   So breathe with me..
..Slow..
Take me down to that place
 where our subconscious thoughts
wed our souls..
     
    Please show me....
.. SO lovely..
   ...that stare full of grace..
       that penetrates, Stoic and cold..   
                        How you don't know what you do..                      
                            ...persuasive like voodoo
 that pulses down..            
                   .... yearnings unfold.

I'll never.. regret this...
           ....all the time spent, invested...
 ... in learning...
                                ....the map to your soul

                      Outside it's still raining...                
                 ... yet I'm ...       
               not complaining..
I'm viscous like oil...
       Take me home.....

Author's Note

Reviews

[Echoes of Eros]

It is soul-stirring how your words and thoughts flow like vibrant waters. There are divine pathways to twin flame vibrations that resound in these stormy cloud journeys, and your wishes for Home awaken everything beautiful in the rainfall resonance. Love INFJ inspirations. xo

[M. L. F.]

INFJ Women should unite and rule the world.. IMO... but yeah .. I guess I'm sorta partial, aren't I? :) Thanks for the read and review...
..Misty

[Echoes of Eros]

I have no doubt that it would be a much better world, and I'm totally unbiased. ;)

[M. L. F.]

Much better indeed... :)

[Echoes of Eros]

I vote INFJ. :)

[M. L. F.]

Winks, Nods, accepts vote.. ;)

[Jibey]

I love the way your words trickle down the page, with images of cold and damp set against feelings of comfort and the nestling of souls... The last thought 'I am viscous like oil' is profoundly sensual...a willing gift...

[Fahmida Mehreen]

This is a mesmerizing piece, I must say.

"Shadows of Sunlight....
..a shroud on a ghost
underneath the horizon..
A stone.
The sun has gone down like my Phoenix"

Beautiful as it can be.

[M. L. F.]

Thank you very much.. I appreciate your sincere appreciation of this piece... really..
..Misty

[Lovecraft]

Good love poem about two souls finding one another. Really like the Title too.

"I'm viscose like oil" should be "I'm viscous like oil" though. Sorry, I'm a wee bit obsessive concerning spelling. ;P

[M. L. F.]

Oh lord... I hate mispelled words too... uhhh... I did spell it wrong now didn't I? Aye... feel free to tell me this stuff.. Better polished than imperfect. It is our craft. Thanks Lovecraft! :)

[M. L. F.]

Corrected thx..

[Lovecraft]

Now it's perfection.

[M. L. F.]

Thanks! :)

[Chris]

Reminds of a Master's control and a submissive's whims...

[M. L. F.]

Cough... yes.. lol Chris.. little bit..

[M. L. F.]

Hadn't noticed but I guess there are some sumbissive undertones happening here.. "Self reflection time".. 🤔

[Chris]

Chuckling here... good morning, coffee is good

[M. L. F.]

Haha! Good morning America.. 😂

[Chris]

A good morning to share a breath and a view.

[Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse]

Well Mrs. Franchello I think this was a very nice read, I like the phoenix in there how it falls but rises, tell me something:

"underneath the horizon..
A stone."

Are you referring to the Sun? If so, bravo, I like that, if not, then what? Thanks

[M. L. F.]

Yes. The stone refers to the setting sun. I was worried I needed to bring that out a bit more. Perhaps I will work on that tomorrow.

[Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse]

Oh no, no, I totally got it. I just wanted to know if I was correct. don't change it at all. I just liked the metaphor a lot.

[M. L. F.]

Thank you. Metaphors are my favorite. I am glad that this one made sense after all. Thank you for reading my work.
..Misty

[LapseOfMind]

Powerful and deep, wonderfully written. A glance inside Of You, if only for a brief moment. A pleasure to read

[M. L. F.]

Thank you. Glad it resonated.
..Misty

[Dr. YumnaKay]

"I'll never.. regret this...
....all the time spent, invested...
... in learning...
....the map to your soul"
This is superb! Sometimes we really don't regret what we did if only for a certain time period.. I loved reading this! It does have a seductive touch to it too, I think 😉
Good work ☺

[M. L. F.]

Yes... The seduction is all a part of the intention. Glad that element came through. It is a grand place to be, in this space. But connecting with someone on a subliminal level does not come along often. Thank you, as always for the wonderful review. Have a great Holiday... :)
...Misty

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You are welcome, Misty ☺
Sadly, I don't have holidays in my part of the world... Hope you enjoy yours though ☺

[M. L. F.]

Aww.. Thank you! I will. And, enjoy your day anyway ! :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hah will do in my case it's night 😂😂😂