On the ocean She drifted, She floated Alone No signal, no Heaven in sight She searched her soul throughout the days, Her hope swallowed whole by the nights She slept atop a tiny raft - It was all that had held her from death Beaten, the tangles of wind in her hair She awoke to a sound like breath And there, now laid a tiny box Golden and gilded by flames A light shot out around the sides - Where the box was joined in it's frame She trailed her hand round it's intricate edge And heard a voice like rain The sound had pierced Persuading her soul No pressure No sorrows She prayed The intricate locks unhinged at once - as she leaned down to stare deep inside to watch those walls all rearrange revealing Jesus' light Stunned, she stared in disbelief On her lap now sat Pandora's box She held it tight as tears spilled down Washing over the priceless locks...
very good. Pandora was the first human women according to myth, in your story she is strong and independent though hanging on alone. I was hoping she would be more skeptical of the box and hurl it into the ocean. Your writing caused much thought and allowed interpretation.
Fairly well-crafted. The words themselves lend a certain melancholy to the work. The inclusion of Pandora's Box was a beautiful nod to Greek myth.
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8 Years Ago
Thank you Lovecraft.. :) I like visuals.. Glad you liked the nod..
8 Years Ago
I own Bulfinch's Mythology, so I tend to love anything regarding Greek mythology. Also Norse Mytholo.. read moreI own Bulfinch's Mythology, so I tend to love anything regarding Greek mythology. Also Norse Mythology because I am distantly related to Erik The Red.
That's pretty cool.. Mythology is a very intriguing subject tbh. My father used to watch the old mo.. read moreThat's pretty cool.. Mythology is a very intriguing subject tbh. My father used to watch the old movies and I'd watch with. I remember Medusa, the snakes, her hair, white blue eyes.. Maybe that is partly why I love horror as an adult. :)
8 Years Ago
Clash of the Titans, the original, lol.
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LOL.. YEAH.. Correct. That little metal owl.. moving all robotic and rolling eyes.. Gotta love old .. read moreLOL.. YEAH.. Correct. That little metal owl.. moving all robotic and rolling eyes.. Gotta love old school CG. :)
Such a beautiful structure carrying a touching story moves the readers well..
This wonderful word craft made me go through imagery and all the emotions of the girl...
Well done Misty.....
Yess.... best words I can hear... that the images play in my readers minds... the emotions also. Th.. read moreYess.... best words I can hear... that the images play in my readers minds... the emotions also. Thank you very very much. Much appreciated words..
..Misty
8 Years Ago
Reading very good poetry is a blissful experience in itself... Thanks to the cafe....
Reading this was a deeply engaging thing for me!I like how you have woven words here..
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8 Years Ago
Thank you. I try hard to paint with words... If that makes sense. Glad you liked it.
...M.. read moreThank you. I try hard to paint with words... If that makes sense. Glad you liked it.
...Misty
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