LASER SHARP AIM

"THE DAMAGED ONES ARE THE DANGEROUS ONES, FOR THEY KNOW THAT THEY CAN SURVIVE" ;)

No clue who he toyed with
No thought who she was
She kept her blade sharpened
And ready to plunge
He'd hurt her, He knew it
Yet he didn't know
that her knives were all sharpened
and ready to go
Her sex appeal sold her
allowing him in
but nothing is safe Now
It's time to defend
She slipped up her black shirt
and slid out the blade
whose cold steel against her
a tiny cut made
she lifted the knife, then
she licked off the blood
looked over her shoulder
a wink and a nod
she focused her vision
her laser sharp aim
and crept down that hallway
that slithering snake
she crept up behind him
as he washed near the tub
and plunged deep her blade in
his spine, just above
the place where his back met
the front of his heart
then whispered, the blade in,
till death do us part....

Author's Note

Sooo...before any of you go thinking wild things, like that this piece's author is insane and Hell bent on destruction and decimation... Allow her to elaborate: This piece is an anthem for strong, clever women everywhere, who have dealt with abuse / cheating / harmful negligence in any aspect, truly. It is in no way to condone nor to glorify actual murder / violence as a means of solving said issues. It is a metaphorical vehicle to drive the story from A to Z. A metaphor to say to men like this, not to take us for fools, for with a wink and a nod, we will draw our cleverly hidden blade on you... and cut you from our lives, when you least expect it.... ;)



SIDE NOTE: When the current story "The Devil's New Disguise" is completed and posted... I will be doing a piece about a female villain, but one who only fights men, until she finds a male counterpart that starts to change her, from the inside out, and I'm not going to tell you the twisty end... ;) This piece has inspired me SO... my imagination is on fire! ;)

Reviews

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*from behind a metal shield*.....

What to say about this poem? Other than......someone lock this woman up!!!! ;) She is very dangerous. The type of alluring seductress who would purchase anything off the home shopping network just to get her hands on those FREE steak knives!!!

A very spine chilling write; one almost certain to have all of mankind peaking over their shoulders at the basin.

Your streak of vengeance continues........

[M. L. F.]

Yasss... peeking over their shoulders at the basin! PERFECT! lolol. Yeah well those kinds of guys ... SHOULD peek over their shoulders... it is only fair. Thank you for the read Doodley. I will surely be checking on what work you have been up to these days. Good work is hard to find these days... hard to find. Quality writing is everything. Practice until you are better and better, is the message we all must obey. And yes, the vengeance streak will always be alive here. Just seems these days it has a new friend too... called love. :) Very new dimensions to journey, especially when you realize you have not ever known such a feeling before, when you thought you had... LOL. No more random ramblings now. Take care Doodley and thanks again for the read.
..Misty

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Good to hear that Cupid has fired an arrow your way! Just remember....he didn't try to kill you! Put the knives down! Smh.....;)

[M. L. F.]

Stepping slowly away from the blade.... *tucks another one away, just in case, for a rainy day*.. :) LOL... but seriously.... feeling nice these days... glad my writing is reflecting it. :) Make no mistake though... I will always appreciate the blade. The suspense and the thrill writing too! :) I must stay true to my genres! I MUST!! haha.. Thanks for stopping by again Doodley.. Will check out your recent stuff on the holiday! Have a great one!
..Misty

[Bodine]

https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=7TbmP2vXeQs

[Chris]

What echoes in the "darkness" behind our eyes? It is ALWAYS our perceptions of every now that flavors and favors our ...breathing... with intent. Sanity is always someone else's perception of our existence.

[Manu]

I am actually speechless after reading this..misty ..
What to say ! It was too good..Though people say forgiveness is the best revenge but there are certain kind of crimes and instances when that kind of attitude actually is very very dangerous. Those strong women who actually took the stand and decided to punish the Wrong doers themselves will definitely bring chill to those who are morally deviant beings.You have very well expressed that aspect of the act in this write..don't mess with this badass woman..
Brilliant write, misty! Keep it up.

[M. L. F.]

Thank you very much. Yes, sometimes women have to be a little badass.. Thanks again for the time in reading and reviewing my work.. Glad you enjoyed the piece.
..Misty

[William Liston]

This is an engaging story. I loved the smooth rhythm and rhyme throughout and how they helped the readability. Although this piece is fairly simple, it had a strong impact on me, primarily because of how it let me visualize everything that happened. As a whole, this piece has the suspense and thrill of a narrative with the flow and expression of a poem. Nicely penned.

- William Liston

[M. L. F.]

Hello William... Thank you for stopping by to see this piece. I shall pay your new work a visit this week as well... I have lots of catching up to do! I am glad that you found the work engaging. The fact that it read, for you, as a suspense narrative in a poem makes me very happy to hear. That it allowed you to visualize is even better. Imagery is everything to me.. :)
Thanks again William..
..Misty

[Donyay Thomas]

I like it you dd a good job

[M. L. F.]

Thank you very much. I am glad you like the piece.
..Misty

[SZHZIA]

Great piece, Franchello on a woman's courage. I really like it. Keep writing.

Best
szhzia

[Unknown Poet]

I really like this ... Convaying A strong women taking revenge on an insane person... Amazing metaphorical poem

[M. L. F.]

I live for metaphors... lol. Thanks.. :)

[Unknown Poet]

There are lots of women getting abused n threatened .... Its not acceptable..thank you for sharing

[M. L. F.]

Agreed. You are welcome.

[GypsyGhost]

I enjoyed the suspense you created. I couldn't get to the next word fast enough!! I seen every bit of it in my mind's. Your use of words to create a story is remarkable!

[M. L. F.]

Hahah! You know, I like to receive tips etc.. when people see a place to improve a piece.. I love to make diamonds. But.. Reviews like this make me high. Thanks for the buzz!
..Truly,
....Misty

[AquaWater5674]

Misty ..Misty..Misty...
Ahhhh...
Your poem...
Like downing a shot of tequilla...
Swallow that worm...
Hmmm....
Savoring this piece...
Cleopatra...
Did this so WELL...
Don't you think????
All men are SNAKES...
We as women...
Our legacy is to charm them..
Preferably ...
Into gentlemen...
Smiling Big Time
Debbie
Very very
Cunning Write...

[M. L. F.]

Aye... Debbie.. WE see eye to eye... This review has me like.... ahhh! Nothing I want MORE than to reach people with my words.. to go to that deeper level... So glad I was able to go there for you! ;) Your words are like water to me!
Truly,
...Misty

[AquaWater5674]

Misty...
Of course not all men are snakes...but..I have been
Privy..to have known quite a few...
Needed a bigger basket to put the remains in...
Lol roaring!!!
Yes...you got to me on a gut level..
Loved it...
DE
3rd EYE

[M. L. F.]

Debbie.. 10-4 on that third eye. I keep it wide open. And yes, I think I have located one that has no reptilian quality's... I feel pleased. Ditto on the roaring, Debbie... ditto. I will check out some of your stuff this weekend...
;) ...Misty

[M. L. F.]

oh gah... it's late here... I just spelled qualities wrong ... LOL

[AquaWater5674]

I haven't posted anything yet...but I will soon..

[M. L. F.]

Let me know when you do Debbie.. I'm there!