IN THE DEPTHS

TO MY ANGELS, THREE..

In the depths of her womb grew a darkening tomb

While the earth crashed around her eclipsing her moon

And the mother, so far along, reeled in great shock

When the little heart no longer thump as it ought

 And the soul of the angel whom heaven had sought

Soared upwards to heaven without a sad thought

But except for his mother asleep in her bed

He stopped first to hover there over her head

Watching her sleep, he laid hand on her heart

And whispered, “In heaven, we never shall part”

Author's Note

For my three sleeping sons...
Xavier, Jude, and Ayden...I will see you again... Assuredly I will....

Reviews

[Bear]

Bravo! Nice rhyme scheme and good emotional depth, I like dark poetry as it is closer to realism and how can you truly know real happiness if you have never been touched by the pain and sorrow of the darker side of life. I give it five out of five Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

[M. L. F.]

Thank you Bear. Yes, it is hard to truly appreciate the light until you have been locked in a dark closet or two. Metaphorically speaking, of course. ;) Glad you enjoyed the write.

[Lovecraft]

I enjoyed the rhyme scheme and the poem certainly is emotionally sincere, so much so I can almost feel it personally. Beautifully written with a startlingly good flow.

Another great poem from Misty. :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

"And whispered, “In heaven, we never shall part”"
These lines touched me on a great degree. This is deep and heartfelt writing! Nice work!

[M. L. F.]

Thank you.. I'm glad it reached the heart. That is the whole point of writing. ;)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Yeah it is.. You are most welcome☺

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This moved me to tears but I adore and admire the unwavering faith and hope that is so deeply rooted in your words.
Without a doubt one of the most memorable pieces I've come across. Starz

[M. L. F.]

I'm stilled.. Writing is a part of me, a huge part of me, and your words serve as an ample compliment. Thank you Starz...

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Oh you're so very welcome, this is very special what you have here x

[FIN]

Quite saddening; but nonetheless beautiful.

I know there's an angel behind those sharp teeth of yours. (;

[M. L. F.]

Far whiter than you could imagine..

[FIN]

(; hah wouldn't of imagined you in any other way.

[zunie frost]

He stopped first to hover there over her head
Watching her sleep, he laid hand on her heart

these lines are outstanding my friend !!
love it

[M. L. F.]

I am glad the piece reached you. Thank you for reading and reviewing my work.
..Misty

[Diamond]

this poem gave me some grave thoughts, please correct me if I am wrong. if it is so I may never be able stop my tears. intensely emotional.

[M. L. F.]

This poem is rooted in three tragic life events that inspired this piece. And while they were tragic and shattering, I have chosen to follow my heart and my faith assured that there is light at the end for myself and my lost loved ones. Thank you so much for the read. Pulling the readers emotions is the number one job of a writer. Thank you for your time in reading and reviewing me..
..Misty

[William Liston]

This is just too good. This is undoubtedly one of the greatest short poems that I have ever read. In your poetry, you seem to have a masterful way of organizing ideas--a way that always leaves me in awe when I finish reading. This poem portrays that skill perfectly. From the nearly perfect vivid imagery in the beginning to the climatic irony at the end, this poem conveyed what I would call "bright darkness," or in other words, an emotional feeling of longing and despair that ultimately becomes silenced at the thought of hope. With amazing imagery and rhyme scheme, you wrote a poem that entranced me more and more with each word. Great work. You really impressed me.

[M. L. F.]

Today, was a special day in regards to my sons... Your review comes with virtually perfect timing. I am so glad you really liked the work. Thank you so much for the time in reading and reviewing it. You have a good grasp on the emotion that powered this piece for me. Wonderful interpretation. :)
..Misty