YOUR GHASTLY LITTLE HUNGER GAMES

YOUR GHASTLY LITTLE HUNGER GAMES

A Poem by M. L. F.
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WOE TO THE ONES WHO LIE AND PLOT... THE LIGHT WILL ALWAYS SEARCH YOU OUT...

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Today I wear a smirking smile, with “less than” love I walked the mile

But now I’m free to spread my wings, No longer bound by sparkling things

I’m bursting out amidst the blue, a world of those surpassing you

They gaze at me, I gaze back too, such chemistry so overdue

For all have told me, you did too, that I deserved much more than you

And everyone will one day know, how warped you are, how far you’d go

The things you did were inhumane, your ghastly little hunger games

Now you’re the one in worried tears, watching as I trample fears

And when the white coats sum you up and finally tell you, you’re corrupt

Don’t look to me, I’ve had enough, I’ve drunk enough from “less than’s” cup

You’re arrogance, your highest crown, the pride before you got pushed down

Will one day soon feel so profound when all have watched your ego drown

© 2016 M. L. F.


Author's Note

M. L. F.
FINAL DRAFT.....sounds much better.. poem debugged. ;)

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You are an extraordinary writer of cautionary pieces. I am a big fan of the dark, yet protective veil you seem to cast over some of your pieces. A salivating sense of righteousness I can certainly vibe to. Your description is quite fitting for this piece; it sums it up quite well. I also think if flow was on your target-of-an-agenda, then you have landed a mighty bulls-eye. Smooth my friend, like jazz. Real smooth.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Beautifully use of words powerful poem..
I like the flow....
Such inhumane people seen in everywhere...
This poem must be appreciated...
Thank you for sharing.... :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


M. L. F.

8 Years Ago

You're welcome, and thank you for reading the work..
..Misty
Unknown Poet

8 Years Ago

My pleasure........
I don't know what the first draft was like but this is superb!! The flow is amazing your internal rhyme, sublime. And I cannot help but add that your write invokes quite the images and thoughts I enjoyed this very much. And the message: Damn good for you if you are able to now spread those wings and a fresh start, because those raw and honest emotions seem to indicate that more than anything else here. The last two lines especially pack quite the punch. Thank you for sharing ^^

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Érenn

8 Years Ago

English would technically be by my 3rd or 4th Language (Hindi, followed by Tamil and Oriya are langu.. read more
M. L. F.

8 Years Ago

Impressive! English is my first language, since I am American by birth. I lived there long and cam.. read more
Érenn

8 Years Ago

Well I wish to learn French, Spanish and even Japanese if possible ^^ Those will pretty cool languag.. read more
Damn that was good. Great work M. L. Franchello.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

M. L. F.

8 Years Ago

Thank you Tsubaki !!
I really loved the raw emotion that was pouring out in this one. Great imagery was displayed in this one as well. Can't wait to see what you do next :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

M. L. F.

8 Years Ago

Thank you! Imagery is important to me.. So this is a wonderful compliment! ;)
Jordan Smith

8 Years Ago

Your Absolutely Welcome :)
Misty,
I think that you did an absolutely amazing job here. I really liked the cadence and the flow of the poem. Keep up the good work!
Semper Fi,
Joe

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

M. L. F.

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much... I'm happy that you liked it. ;)
Joe W

8 Years Ago

You're welcome.
nothing like a new start after being held back by another's misguided love and ownership----truly free to love...and that is how it should be always...as they say, set something free and if it loves it will come back to you...
and i really like "less than love"---

j.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

M. L. F.

8 Years Ago

Thank you j. I revised it and it's much better now... ( I think ).. :) I'm glad you enjoyed the se.. read more
I loved its flow and its rhythmic motion. Well all I can say is that this one's going in my library.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

M. L. F.

8 Years Ago

Thank you. I revised it. Hope you like the final version as well. :) Thanks for putting me in yo.. read more
Very intense wordplay. These words are like punches. The message of rising up is a perfect twist on the Easter tradition.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

M. L. F.

8 Years Ago

Thank you Clifford. I was worried that Easter wasn't exactly great timing as the work is a little f.. read more
Misty, nice work here. I think you'll be able to smooth out a few places, but really great work here. Some of the lines that really show off your talent with crafting powerful expressions were:

"when the white coats sum you up" (Nice expression of the doctors who'll be looking that this "less than" lover. All I can say is that I don't envy the white coats!)
"I’ve drunk enough from “less than’s” cup" (I love this expression...it really was a "less than" love...not what you were promised or could have expected.)

In my opinion, the last two lines are really, really good and close the piece with a nice punch. Just a thought, but you might consider changing something about the last phrase to make it smooth/rhyme more closely. It's a taste thing I suppose, though, so go for what you think works.

Brava!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Takeshi Yamada

8 Years Ago

Misty, the rewrite looks great! :) Flows wear, meanings are a bit clearer, and the punch is powerful.. read more
Takeshi Yamada

8 Years Ago

flows wear => flows wells ;)
M. L. F.

8 Years Ago

Haha... yes, 102.5 fever I have right now.. Doctor saw me today and said I have the "second wave" of.. read more
Powerful thoughts and words used.
"Don’t look to me, I’ve had enough, I’ve drunk enough from “less than’s” cup"
I wanted to know and read more. Life is fair. Winners shall fall and the meek shall know true victory. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


M. L. F.

8 Years Ago

Thanks so much Coyote... It is a statement about rising again, if a little aggressive, but yes, that.. read more
Coyote Poetry

8 Years Ago

I agree and you are welcome.

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