YOUR GHASTLY LITTLE HUNGER GAMES

WOE TO THE ONES WHO LIE AND PLOT... THE LIGHT WILL ALWAYS SEARCH YOU OUT...

Today I wear a smirking smile, with “less than” love I walked the mile

But now I’m free to spread my wings, No longer bound by sparkling things

I’m bursting out amidst the blue, a world of those surpassing you

They gaze at me, I gaze back too, such chemistry so overdue

For all have told me, you did too, that I deserved much more than you

And everyone will one day know, how warped you are, how far you’d go

The things you did were inhumane, your ghastly little hunger games

Now you’re the one in worried tears, watching as I trample fears

And when the white coats sum you up and finally tell you, you’re corrupt

Don’t look to me, I’ve had enough, I’ve drunk enough from “less than’s” cup

You’re arrogance, your highest crown, the pride before you got pushed down

Will one day soon feel so profound when all have watched your ego drown

Author's Note

FINAL DRAFT.....sounds much better.. poem debugged. ;)

Reviews

[PhoenixDown]

You are an extraordinary writer of cautionary pieces. I am a big fan of the dark, yet protective veil you seem to cast over some of your pieces. A salivating sense of righteousness I can certainly vibe to. Your description is quite fitting for this piece; it sums it up quite well. I also think if flow was on your target-of-an-agenda, then you have landed a mighty bulls-eye. Smooth my friend, like jazz. Real smooth.

[M. L. F.]

Lol.. Thanks Phoenix. I'm glad you liked it. I tend to get a little fierce with the poetry.. :) Just tell me to calm down if I go too nuts.. 😉

[PhoenixDown]

A great poetess once told me to always maintain my intensity. I think I will pass along that advice to you, now. (Insert a smirk here.)

You're welcome Misty.

[FIN]

Your verse seems to take on a build up and swiftly cut down approach, as if you have a sharp tongue indeed.

Only saying enough to set the tone; and then going in for the kill.

It makes for good reading. I'm learning a lot from your style.

Much love.

[M. L. F.]

You are onto something with the second sentence. ;) Good eye. And thank you again for the lovely compliment. Glad to help. :)

..Misty

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Killer good open and close....great book ends. I love the voice here its elegantly fierce, the words kinda spat our like a bitter pill of realisation. Awesome! Cheers Starz

[M. L. F.]

Thank you.. Glad it resonated with you and thank you for the time in reading my work Starz. ;)

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Sure thing, when it's good it's time well spent.

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Love the pem. You captured the when you think you have someone wrapped around your finger then when they are gone you realize how foolish you were to behave that way. Love " now you're the one in worried tears" because been the one with the ego and drown so it hit home of how foolish some of us can be. Thanks for sharing this powerful poem.

[M. L. F.]

I am glad the piece resonated with you. This person did a whole lot more than have a giant ego though. If that were his only offense, this poem would not have been harsh. ;) He did some unthinkable stuff, by most standards, inhumane things, was sorry for two weeks, then turned the blame back on others and put his ego back on high, to the point of blaming utterly innocent people... Even minors... That is where the rocket fuel of this piece stems from. It is good that we all learn our own lessons in life, and if this piece helped you in any way, even just to remind you of a place you don't want to return to again... then I am happy. :) Thanks for taking the time to read and review me and I am glad you liked the piece. :)
..Misty

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Thank Misty for elevoraring even further on your writing it makes this poem even more real. Yeah, that is a place I do not want to go anymore and it just happen this last spring and let me tell you, I apologize my a*s off but it was too late. Yeah, I learned my lesson and I screwed up a good thing. Your poem just reminded me of drowning. Thanks for sharing such a powerful piece. Laters, N.

[M. L. F.]

The fundamental thing about drowning is that it brings back up to the surface with us things we never knew were there before we fell in... ;) You are always welcome.
..Misty

[RedHairedWarrior]

Beautifully written and full of imagery. Vague enough that a person can read it from many different angles, but not too vague that it loses its power.

[M. L. F.]

Thank you very much Katherine Garvin. I am glad the imagery came through for you, that is always my greatest hope in any work. Thank you for the time to read and review me.
...Misty

[William Liston]

I love it when a poet actually pays attention to rhythm and metre.This poem conveyed an overwhelming sense of confidence commingled with a hint of pride and sassiness. I loved it. I look forward to reading more of your poems.

[M. L. F.]

Again, a spot on interpretation. I appreciate when the reader takes the time to grasp the real underlying emotions.. Makes sharing the work, worth while.
Thank you so much,
..Misty

[William Liston]

You are more than welcome. I really enjoy reading your poetry.

[Antoñyo]

Didn't read the other draft(s) but I doubt they sounded as good as this.
The flow passed only by the potent content...ya gotta admire the strength and resolve
to move on WITHOUT the presence of or need for vengeance.
A wonderful read, thanks for sharing this 100/100!

[M. L. F.]

Thank you Antonyo for the review. Thanks for reading me..
..Misty

[Antoñyo]

You're welcome

[Matilda Ann]

I love the mood of this poem, really edgy and emotional. You really nailed that feel and I love it. I also love the smoothness the rhyme adds. The poem flows very well as I read it, however the third last line (Don’t look to me, I’ve had enough, I’ve drunk enough from “less than’s” cup), tripped me up a little as I read it, and that broke the flow a little. Other than that though, I love this poem :) can't wait to read more of your work!

[M. L. F.]

Thanks for the review. I appreciate the time to read and review me.
..Misty

[Terrence Chang]

Short and lovely. I loved it very much

[M. L. F.]

I appreciate your time in reading and reviewing my work. I am glad you loved it.
...Misty

[Terrence Chang]

You are most welcome