IN YOUR SHADOW WHERE I SHONE

IN YOUR SHADOW WHERE I SHONE

A Poem by M. L. F.
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For my father, whose years were far less than I had wished...

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Remembering when I was small

You held my hand, I felt so tall

Atop your lap, a mighty throne,

within your shadow where I shone.

You taught me how to catch a fish,

to toss a coin and make a wish

Oh how I wish I had those coins

I’d reverse time just to enjoy

 the sun as it set on the lake,

to stop you on that fateful day -

You took your life, I wasn’t there

Upon your lake of dark despair.

I’d take those shining coins of gold

Back to your shadow...

 ...Where I shone

 

 

 

© 2017 M. L. F.


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It is the best expression of love for a father from you...
REMEMBERING WHEN I WAS SMALL
YOU HELD MY HAND, I FELT SO TALL
ATOP YOUR LAP, A MIGHTY THRONE
WITHIN YOUR SHADOW WHERE I SHONE
The above lines stolen my heart …. It is filled with emotions… really I like it… Thank you for sharing….
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Szhzia

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

M. L. F.

8 Years Ago

Thank you for the time in reading and reviewing my work. I'm glad the feeling resonated with you. .. read more
SZHZIA

8 Years Ago

It is my pleasure...



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This was really touching. My parents divorced when I was really young, so I didn't see my dad very much. About a week ago, he had a heart attack. And now I'll never see him again. I didn't have a connection to my dad like you had with yours, but this poem still means a lot to me.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

M. L. F.

8 Years Ago

Also, I hope this doesn't sound too cliche, as I know everyone believes something different about li.. read more
Hannah

8 Years Ago

You're so sweet to say all those things! You are a very thoughtful person. Thank you for all the kin.. read more
M. L. F.

8 Years Ago

You deserve kind thoughts. And you are more than welcome. (hugs back) :)
Very impactful. Very reminiscent. I can practically see emotions running off these words. My father was never part of my life, so I can't claim to be able to relate. Regardless, the grandeur of this piece isn't lost to me. Such terrible things are too often forced upon great people. Take care, Misty.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

M. L. F.

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much Clifford. :) Your review means a lot. It felt really good hearing that you could.. read more
You make me miss my dad...awesome!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

M. L. F.

8 Years Ago

Thank you. Glad to hear that the poem was moving for you. Really..
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Yes my friend, yes this is beautifuly drawn.

Posted 8 Years Ago


M. L. F.

8 Years Ago

Thank you very much. :)
That touched my heart. It is both sad and beautiful. Great job.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

M. L. F.

8 Years Ago

Thank you Tsubaki... Glad it reached you..
This is a lovely poem and a sad story. Thanks for sharing it.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I'm so sorry to hear about your father. Memories can be a comfort; they help us survive.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

M. L. F.

8 Years Ago

Hi Robert.. Yes, they can be. I lost him a while back, but looking at my two year old son who has t.. read more
oh my word what a lovely, heartfelt piece. you can feeel the emotion coming through the words in this one. such a sad poem :( but a beautiful piece of word to remind everyone who reads of your love and respect for someone who made you feel ten foot tall. beautifully done, full marks

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

M. L. F.

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much. Your words mean a lot to me...

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