IN YOUR SHADOW WHERE I SHONE

IN YOUR SHADOW WHERE I SHONE

A Poem by M. L. F.
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For my father, whose years were far less than I had wished...

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Remembering when I was small

You held my hand, I felt so tall

Atop your lap, a mighty throne,

within your shadow where I shone.

You taught me how to catch a fish,

to toss a coin and make a wish

Oh how I wish I had those coins

I’d reverse time just to enjoy

 the sun as it set on the lake,

to stop you on that fateful day -

You took your life, I wasn’t there

Upon your lake of dark despair.

I’d take those shining coins of gold

Back to your shadow...

 ...Where I shone

 

 

 

© 2017 M. L. F.


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It is the best expression of love for a father from you...
REMEMBERING WHEN I WAS SMALL
YOU HELD MY HAND, I FELT SO TALL
ATOP YOUR LAP, A MIGHTY THRONE
WITHIN YOUR SHADOW WHERE I SHONE
The above lines stolen my heart …. It is filled with emotions… really I like it… Thank you for sharing….
Best
Szhzia

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

M. L. F.

8 Years Ago

Thank you for the time in reading and reviewing my work. I'm glad the feeling resonated with you. .. read more
SZHZIA

8 Years Ago

It is my pleasure...



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I am sorry for your loss.Reading this, I could think of was my uncle I lost to cancer.He died within 6 months, after the diagnosis and I miss him so much .

This poem was very well written, and again I am sorry for your loss.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Lovely tale filled with the depth where water swallowed the coins.

Regards,
Al

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

M. L. F.

8 Years Ago

Beautifully stated... Thank you for the read.
..Misty
It is the best expression of love for a father from you...
REMEMBERING WHEN I WAS SMALL
YOU HELD MY HAND, I FELT SO TALL
ATOP YOUR LAP, A MIGHTY THRONE
WITHIN YOUR SHADOW WHERE I SHONE
The above lines stolen my heart …. It is filled with emotions… really I like it… Thank you for sharing….
Best
Szhzia

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

M. L. F.

8 Years Ago

Thank you for the time in reading and reviewing my work. I'm glad the feeling resonated with you. .. read more
SZHZIA

8 Years Ago

It is my pleasure...
Powerful and sad story shared in the poetry. Losing a father when young. A hard thing to understand. Thank you dear Poet for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

M. L. F.

8 Years Ago

Thank you for the thoughts Coyote. I'm glad you liked the work...
..Misty
Coyote Poetry

8 Years Ago

I do and you are welcome.
It is a heart aching story well told. When you are small your father is your god but when this awful thing happens you have no chance to discover him as a man.
The reader is not always sure if the work is based on personal experience but I know myself that the act of writing about these experiences can be cathartic.
Well done!
I would be interested to see what you make of my story 'The field'
Thanks,
Alan



Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

M. L. F.

8 Years Ago

I am really not a poet, to be honest I write fiction. I am trying to complete a novel my creative w.. read more
i feel sorry for you loss...

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

M. L. F.

8 Years Ago

Thank you.. Very sweet of you.
..Misty
I am not much of poet. Nonetheless, I liked what I read.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

M. L. F.

8 Years Ago

Thank you. I am glad you found the read worth the time..
..Misty
I too, noticed the use of rhyme when recollecting the childish memories, but blank verse with the adult longings.
To me, this made a definite emphasis of the transition of time and emotion.
A sad but affectionate poem,Misty, that shocks with its final poignancy.

Norman

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

M. L. F.

8 Years Ago

Thank you Norman. Your review is appreciated, your opinion respected. The emphasis is intentional .. read more
Misty,
I found this one to be incredibly powerful and moving. It really brings up memories and all that but it really encourages us, at least I hope it does, to take the moments that we have with our parents and our loved ones and to really cherish those times because you never know when you are going to look back and think, "man if only...."
Semper Fi,
Joe

Posted 8 Years Ago


Hey Misty ^^ I think I missed this one by mistake ^^' Now this is a wonderful poem with a lot of vivid imagery created by your words here. This piece might become relatable with many people ^^ Now first the structure is maintained throughout the poem which gives it the flow that's needed, ^^ I think this might be intentional but wherever used rhymes(except the last pair of rhymes) you have made it sound a little childish making me feel the child in you whose remembering her childhood has wrote those few lines and the rest is being written by the adult Misty remembering the childhood as well as the darkness that was present in it. It's really very well written and you have expressed a lot in these few words. One could have written a lot more but may not have given the impact and the punch this one holds. There is darkness as the child in you tries to capture the sparks (memories) which may light a torch that might help to make way through those dark times.... I really loved this one Thank you so much for sharing. I did get immersed into it even if it meant to bear a little pain.....

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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