MY GLASS MAN

When was the moment you were lost my glass man splintering?

A fraction of the man you were now lost in misery

The blazing starlight of my love beguiled the stars in space

I see you now awash in pain as tears stream down your face

How can it be, you were the one, my deep abiding love.

But now the pain of great disdain wraps tighter than a glove.

And yet the thing that’s saddening above all else you’ve done

was throw away, by choice you made, the fate of two for one.

 As hope abides, my soul divides, and feels yet split in two.

  And now my quest to find true rest from the splintering of you..   

Author's Note

Need to bleed upon the paper, every now and again... What better place than poetry, to help seal off the wounds?

Reviews

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S**t.......this was a hard poem for me to read, as i guess you have gathered.

I am this glass man, today. Shattered. Splintered. Riven. And not by my choice. It is not always the one who leaves that falls like shards of glass. The devoted, the truthful, the faithful, the heart and soul of a couple also falls to ground and shatters into a million pieces.
This is a very relevant poem; something that we can all relate to. Especially those of us who followed our hearts, loved unconditionally and were discarded like yesterday's leftovers.
A very potent poem, Misty, definitely hit the heart with this one. Great work.

[M. L. F.]

Thanks Doodley.. Funny thing is, I was the one who did the discarding, but because the hidden transgressions were so beyond shocking, I was left with really no other option but to.. That is what this piece is about for me. It's about the fact that something snapped along the way inside of him it seemed, and he changed, little by little, into something dark and unrecognizable. Into a person with deeds that shocked all in his world when they came into light, as these things always do... I am glad you liked the piece, and sorry you are feeling these things for yourself but in a different manner, sad all the same. Thanks again for the read and the lovely review...
..Misty

[hcarson]

i really like this one, it flows perfectly to my mind, and i love the expression ''glass man splintering''...where did that come from, its perfect for what you are describing. well written, really enjoyed this one full marks :)

[M. L. F.]

It came to my mind because he is literally splintered mentally and emotionally, even his life is splintered now. Thus it fit.... Even better, check out the pic for the work. I found it amazingly after writing and titling the piece. Thanks for the kind review! ;)

[hcarson]

excellent, well worth it :)

[M. L. F.]

Thank you... :)

[Érenn]

Memories both painful and full of regrets. Thinking of those times when the man used to be something else to the narrator and how he has reduced to this sorry state. And how there are times the narrator still ends up having those pity pangs for this man. And at the same time there is this reveal of what he ended up doing to the narrator in process. What he ruined and what he left the narrator with and when he left as well. The structure is maintained throughout the poem. The tone inculcated through these words suits this write. The imagery invoked through word choices quite nicely done. Love the subtle rhymes that exists from the third line. All in all dark and poignant yet well expressed. Thank you for sharing.

[M. L. F.]

Thank you Errenn. You got the vibe and the message of the work, and that's all that matters. I am glad the imagery was good for you, as imagery is the most important part for me as the writer. Thanks for your interpretation.. It was pretty spot on. Thank you for the read.. :) ....Misty