TRIED TO STITCH IT

Tears of sorrow, try to fix it

Sorry’s never been enough

Took his thread and tried to stitch it

Tender heart has grown too tough

Wish I would have caught him in it

Twinkling seas of twisted lust

Talking to me just won’t fix it

Should have thought before he touched

Preyed on innocence to have it

Perversions are his private hush

Took his thread and tried to stitch it

Should have sewn his own mouth shut...

Reviews

[Bala Gorthi]

The message is very loud and clear, Misty.
When someone preys on innocence the act can never be forgiven the act itself becomes inhumane whether is small or big, in word or deed because the intentions are malefide. What you wrote as "Talking to me just wont fix" is very right and plain enough.
A very nice write.
Thanks for sharing.:-):-):-)

[M. L. F.]

Thank you very much Bala. I'm glad the message got through to you. :) Thanks for reading my work. :)
Misty

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh yes, on that last line....a stitch in time saves nine...or something.

we need to think before we leap...and if we stray, we have to pay...and trust is the hardest thing to rebuild.

well expressed here.

j.

[M. L. F.]

Thank you very much jacob. Yes true sentiments. Sometimes the best thing to do is to take the time to learn about yourself and what it is that you really need in life first. Then let someone new into the picture to give a little bit of trust to. :)

[E G TEN]

Hey Misty, this one has a personal touches here and there, nevertheless it speaks
About our disguises or camouflage which is happens to be a defensive trait, or sometimes
In denial to face the fact and truth. Very well put young lady, cool as well , Thanks EG.

[M. L. F.]

Thanks a lot EG. Yes, some people do this better than others, unfortunately. lol

[EileenMarie]

I found your poem very gripping from the start. Raw emotion packs a powerful punch. Great write!

[M. L. F.]

Thank you very much.... There was a lot of raw emotion around for fuel. ;) Thanks for the read!

[Terrence Chang]

Your work represents powerful expressions. That your beauty of works. I have enjoyed reading it. Looking forward to see some more works of yours

[M. L. F.]

Thank you, glad you enjoyed reading it..

[Chellie]

Beautifully written. It flowed perfectly and invoked very powerful images. This is s writing from the heart, that must be important to you. Tragic events always seem to bring out the best writing in us, and that is great because its one of the best ways to express your feelings about it. That is exactly what you did here, and it is beautiful.

[M. L. F.]

Thank you.... I saw your profile and have to say music is great✨ And I minored in photography in college✨😊. And Muse is great! Glad you like the write..
... Misty

[Érenn]

Again it seems that putrid truth is revealed in these lines. This is raw and unfortunately gut wrenching. Makes me wonder how you had to deal with that. Now for the poem itself. I like the occasional rhyme here and there. The structure and meter is maintained throughout the write. The imagery invoked here is quite powerful. And I believe the man here mentioned had a silver tongue. Or should I say his trickery can be compared to one of Loki's pranks. Cleverly hiding his true intentions while keeping a facade. Dark and poignant, yet such power and truth in it. Thank you for sharing.

[M. L. F.]

You are welcome. I suspected things, but any wrongdoing was denied by all parties involved and I was told I was imagining things. Then one day it all came bursting out... The pin was pulled and I was left holding a grenade. We are all coming out stronger and on top of this. That is what tragedy does, it either breaks you or makes you, I always opt for the ladder... ;) Thank you for the review. I am glad you felt the "Imagery invoked here is quite powerful".... That is my main goal in writing, to put the reader there, particularly in my fiction. Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts and taking the time to read me.
... Misty ;)

[Tate Morgan]

I take it this is about a man who deceived you on his good graces.It is my opinion that the qualities that we use to admire in men are still the qualities we admire However corporate culture has taught our citizens that the worship of money is more important than the quality of honesty integrity and value. I am one who believes that a man should be judged not by his beliefs but by his deeds For me the value of a man lies not in what he owns but what he gives to others.

[M. L. F.]

Indeed.... and his deeds were dastardly to say the least. There is a great difference between a good man who falls hard and a dark man who hides his darkness. Effectively enough to cause mass destruction amidst the lives of many who entrusted him with their everything.....

[Tate Morgan]

It is sad but true We need to teach our daughters to distinguish between a man who flatters her and a man that compliments her. A man who spends money on her and one who invests in her. A man who views her as property and a man who views her properly One who lusts after her and one who loves her The man who believes he is a gift to women and the man who thinks she is a gift to him And then we need to teach our sons to be that man

[M. L. F.]

.... Perfectly worded Tate. These things are crucial. It is a jungle out there, and I just hope that those kind of men still exist for all of us. I have to believe that they do, I am an eternal dreamer... ;)

[Tate Morgan]

A good man isn't just good to you, he is good to everyone.

[M. L. F.]

Now riddle me this? What about the ones who seem good to everyone, but it turns out to be incredible, award winning acting and manipulation skills? I guess if you wait long enough before you lock yourself down with one of these guys, their spots will start to surface before it's too late...

[Tate Morgan]

Find out how they treat their exes and what they say of them If everything that went wrong was the other persons fault look out

[Tate Morgan]

Do not look at the ex as your enemy but a source of knowledge

[M. L. F.]

The best text book I have ever read.. Solid advice. No better teacher has ever existed on the subject, than he...

[Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse]

Seduction, seduction, seduction. Oh how it eats you away. This is a very good piece.

[M. L. F.]

Thank you....

[Antoñyo]

I literally had to read this one three times...and it got better each time. Love when that happens!
Potent, PURE, and leaves the reader (this one, anyway) spellbound!

What talent darkness makes emerge occasionally. Thanks for sharing!

[M. L. F.]

Thank you..

[Tsubaki Kuro]

what a gorgeous poem. So dark ,which i like. Hopefully you didn't write this out of experience.

[M. L. F.]

Thank you so much... And yes, I did... I usually stick to fiction, it's my first love, but the poetry has proved an effective emotional outlet for me as of late. I have a novel, horror genre I am editing and a horror genre short story to put up here soon, because I also love dark ;) Thanks for taking the time to read my work. So glad you enjoyed it.
... Misty

[Tsubaki Kuro]

Sorry to hear that. And I can't wait to read more of your works

[M. L. F.]

Can't wait to finish more to share... ;)