TRIED TO STITCH IT

Tears of sorrow, try to fix it

Sorry’s never been enough

Took his thread and tried to stitch it

Tender heart has grown too tough

Wish I would have caught him in it

Twinkling seas of twisted lust

Talking to me just won’t fix it

Should have thought before he touched

Preyed on innocence to have it

Perversions are his private hush

Took his thread and tried to stitch it

Should have sewn his own mouth shut...

Reviews

[Bala Gorthi]

The message is very loud and clear, Misty.
When someone preys on innocence the act can never be forgiven the act itself becomes inhumane whether is small or big, in word or deed because the intentions are malefide. What you wrote as "Talking to me just wont fix" is very right and plain enough.
A very nice write.
Thanks for sharing.:-):-):-)

[M. L. F.]

Thank you very much Bala. I'm glad the message got through to you. :) Thanks for reading my work. :)
Misty

[FIN]

I love this. This work is blunt and straight to the point. It's a nice touch to the emotional integrity of the poem.

Your intensity in writing is something that I am growing quite fond of.

[M. L. F.]

Intensity... is everything. Who wants to be lukewarm?

[FIN]

I meant more "fierce."

Rather than say, kind, gentle, peaceful, etc.

[M. L. F.]

Thank you. I'm honored, LR.

[Leo]

Creative and piercing like a tip of spear..well done

[-]

I find you writing very intense like you're getting stuff out of the basement. And it is true, their are times that sorry is not enough. I few months ago, I hurt someone and sorry was not enough even though I truly was there are rips that cannot be mended anymore. I really hit home. N.

[Dusk]

the concept is incredible; there's so much truth and reality attached to this poem. Loved it :)

[M. L. F.]

Thank you for reading and reviewing my work. I am glad to hear you liked it. More truth and reality than you know. Thank you..
Misty

[Scarlet Jackal]

Gritty and deep. I love it

[M. L. F.]

Thank you very much. ;)

[Scarlet Jackal]

*bows* any time

[TheOneWhoNotices]

Extremely well written!! Raw and woven with great skill!

[M. L. F.]

Thank you very much. I had quite the arsenal of gasoline to fuel the burn... when the emotional tank is full, it's time for poetry. ;) Thanks for the read and the review.
,.Misty

[TheOneWhoNotices]

Very true! XD You are welcome, it was my pleasure!

[Norman 223]

Calculated deceit is hard to forgive, as any apparent remorse may be equally deceitful. Those that do the hard sell must expect a hard lesson. A strong unequivocal message in your poem, which I hope was hypothetical and not personal fact.

[M. L. F.]

I couldn't have said it better myself Norman. That was beautiful what you said, and now I am going to print it and frame it! lol ;) Yes, unfortunately it is from personal experience. It was a festive Christmas, let's say that! Haha... Just so much better now, life is... for me in all areas. I love the direction I am being moved in! :) Have some nice poems to show for it too lol... :)
Thanks for your review and wonderful sentiments..
..Misty

[Joe W]

Misty,
Wow. This one really has a lot of truth in it. So many people go around wearing disguises and since we often don't know who they really are, the disguise is who we perceive them to truly be. Thanks for sharing this. I really enjoyed it.
Semper Fi,
Joe

[M. L. F.]

Very clever... Someone who gets it! ;) How sad it is that some people are such great actors, while the rest of us just live with our souls on our sleeves. Here's to hoping that the ladder people all find one another...
... Misty

PS... Do you know the Latin translation of Semper Fi?

[Joe W]

Misty,
It is sad that that is how some people are. I used to be that way and really, still am in some ways.
Semper fi,
Joe
P.S. The whole phrase is Semper Fidelis which in Latin stands for Always Faithful. It is the motto of the United States Marine Corps which I was never in but I did train to become a Marine for a while some time last year.

[M. L. F.]

Yes... I was in reference to the Latin definition of Always Faithful. But yes, I know about the marine version too. :) Cool that you got to train with them though..

[Joe W]

I went to a school that taught Latin. In all my 5 years there, I never took it though.

[M. L. F.]

Lol... I would love to learn Latin. It is such a beautiful language really...

[Joe W]

Yeah. i'm currently studying Hebrew

[M. L. F.]

That's intense..

[David Lewis Paget]

Hate the caps, it seems to be screaming at me. Quite like the rhythm and flow, and that last line provoked a smile, as if you just couldn't help yourself. I don't know about 'twinkling seas of twisted lust'. From what I remember there was nothing twinkling about my lust. This reminds me a little of the type of thing I used to write 40 years ago, when I was more interested in the rhyme and impact than in it actually making sense. Am I supposed to know what the 'white disguise' is? Sorry, I don't.

[M. L. F.]

lol, David... :) The twinkling seas of twisted lust simply represent that he thought he was in some sick little hidden sea of lust, that NOBODY knew about... but HIM, and his victim. And that to him it was all twinkling and great, until he got caught, that is.... The white disguise is just a way of saying, he "wore his white disguise".. white representing purity here. He wore a disguise of white, of innocence to get what he wanted. Like a teacher who is only teaching to get access to children... that kind of "white disguise"... not too tricky lol. :)