Of belief & disbelief in unseen things...And to those whose eyes are open wide to the realms of the shadows of good & evil, and those whose are locked shut...Of one man who uses lies & logic to hide..
I WONDER AS I DRIFT HERE LOST IN THUNDEROUS
IMAGINATIONS
IF SEEING GHOSTS IN EVERY CORNER TIS MAD MAN’S
ABBERRATION
THE DREAMING DAYS BLEED INTO NIGHT AWASH IN
THINGS UNSEEN
AND YET I SEE BEYOND THICK FROST THROUGH OTHERS’
MYSTERIES
THE SLEEPING MAN SHALL WIELD HIS LOGIC LIKE A
MIGHTY SWORD
BUT ALL THE WHILE HIS EYES ARE SHUT TO TRUTHS HE
CAN’T AFFORD
HE SMEARS HIMSELF IN EVIL LIES TO TWIST TRUTH
INTO THEORY
YET ALL THE WHILE THE UNDERWORLD EXISTS AMIDST
THOSE HEARING
THE SECRET PATH THAT OPEN EYES ENVISION IS NEVER
LOST
AND THOSE WHO SEEK ITS TRUTH AVAIL TO PAY ITS
HEAVY COST
I WONDER STILL WHILE DRIFTING LOST IN THUNDEROUS
IMAGINATIONS
IF LIGHT AND DARKNESS EVEN CROSS THEIR LOGICAL
CONTEMPLATIONS
Best piece I've read so far. I dig the rhymes and flow. Trapped in dark and being lost. Everybody search for light and truth. I've been there in the corners. Can you blame me?
The better path will open up to you finding yourself in the sight of belief. That's where it led me. Enlightening to me to find myself PARTLY in this ghost of a man you write about but light has washed me purer already. My attempt to leave a less shallow review, ms.
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
I believe the better path opens up to you when you die to yourself / flesh and let in the light that.. read moreI believe the better path opens up to you when you die to yourself / flesh and let in the light that consumes and cleanses. The light that causes us to want to remove our logic blinders and raise our eyes upwards with new sight... not physical sight, but eyes of faith which we can use to put and keep us on that path less traveled..
Thank you for the kind review.. This is my favorite older piece.
Misty
7 Years Ago
My favourite too. Well put Misty. I relate to your pov.
Best piece I've read so far. I dig the rhymes and flow. Trapped in dark and being lost. Everybody search for light and truth. I've been there in the corners. Can you blame me?
The better path will open up to you finding yourself in the sight of belief. That's where it led me. Enlightening to me to find myself PARTLY in this ghost of a man you write about but light has washed me purer already. My attempt to leave a less shallow review, ms.
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
I believe the better path opens up to you when you die to yourself / flesh and let in the light that.. read moreI believe the better path opens up to you when you die to yourself / flesh and let in the light that consumes and cleanses. The light that causes us to want to remove our logic blinders and raise our eyes upwards with new sight... not physical sight, but eyes of faith which we can use to put and keep us on that path less traveled..
Thank you for the kind review.. This is my favorite older piece.
Misty
7 Years Ago
My favourite too. Well put Misty. I relate to your pov.
New favorite poemnof mine. This is excellent! Pure genius. Well played!
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
Why thank you! ;) This is my favorite poem too... I'm no poet, but this one I kinda feel good abou.. read moreWhy thank you! ;) This is my favorite poem too... I'm no poet, but this one I kinda feel good about. :) Thanks so much for the read and review...
..Misty
This is often how I feel. I just let my mind wander and drift into the subconsciousness. It's often how I get a lot of my work out as well. I do it with both my writing and my drawing. There's a truth in this where we see basically what we want to see. "AND YET I SEE BEYOND THICK FROST THROUGH OTHERS’ MYSTERIES" What other people think is a mystery we have the knowledge to explan yet we find things in our own lives which we don't understand but someone else might. "BUT ALL THE WHILE HIS EYES ARE SHUT TO TRUTHS HE CAN’T AFFORD". Overall a powerful and inspiring poem.
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
Thanks... This one is a bit tricky because it weaves between two subjects a bit. Between belief and.. read moreThanks... This one is a bit tricky because it weaves between two subjects a bit. Between belief and disbelief in things unseen, God, Heaven, Hell, Demons, Angels, the spiritual realms themselves. And telling a story about a man I know who believes in nothing but his own lies, who uses "logic" to explain away his own sins... He uses "logic" to make wrong sound right. It is a piece to describe how "the sleeping man" (he) uses his logic to manipulate the most evil things to sound angelic. To use science and theory to explain away his ills.. This, and the other poem tied to it, "wear your white disguise" are my favorite. I don't much like my other poems, excluding the one about my father, which makes me think of him. He was a pilot in the Air force, by the way...
8 Years Ago
That is why he sleeps.. because he has chosen to shut his eyes to what he knows might exist, to excl.. read moreThat is why he sleeps.. because he has chosen to shut his eyes to what he knows might exist, to exclude his own accountability. And because the truth of his own actions is just too heinous for even he, to accept...( to truth's he can't afford )
Thank you. This is the one I enjoyed writing the most. :) Thanks for the read, glad you liked it... read moreThank you. This is the one I enjoyed writing the most. :) Thanks for the read, glad you liked it..
Hi kiddo sorry this took so long I had my grand kids all weekend and simply haven't been able to get anything done. It is easy to ignore the violence and the truth that surrounds us everywhere and defines what it is to be a human being. I often think we delude ourselves about what is true an what is not. I can not be sure of exactly what you speak.But will talk of what it means to me. In America you know we have a presidential election at the moment. We have a choice between a blatant racist and a true progressive. In this country the truth is always hidden be the media We have seen the deletion of public debates. CNN actually deleted comments from our debates in an effort to deny us the truth. It is best to say that we should all be better educated and more aware. Denying truth does not make it less true. We are at a turning point in our lives where we will either go through our live blissfully unaware of reality or get off our butts and demand the truth.
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
Completely agree Tate... Blindness only leaves everyone happily fumbling about. Better to see what .. read moreCompletely agree Tate... Blindness only leaves everyone happily fumbling about. Better to see what is really going on and obtain the ability to react accordingly....
This world of light and darkness arouses the wild storms of the imagination. So much exists beyond the realm of our shallow eyesight, and it is a dreamish place of shadows and light that you express so powerfully here. There is a world in these 12 brilliant lines. xo
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
Thank you. I love it when people understand the underlying meaning. Thanks for the read :)
I've always contemplated a character. A man of logic; who is blind to everything beyond the grasps of his "omni-potent" logics. Lie is no Evil if it can be 'logicalized', the truth is adjusted to what he can comprehend. His life is his logic and anything beyond; in-existent. This man sees what he will...believes himself a Saint, condemning and judging at the mercy of his 'biased' logic.
This is just what came to mind. Great poem 'M':)
That was quite perceptive Mr. Krizito... And by far THE most spot on interpretation of this work thu.. read moreThat was quite perceptive Mr. Krizito... And by far THE most spot on interpretation of this work thus far! Very well played Sir*.. Very well played.... ;)
It is the logical man that sleeps in fear of great truths, yet those truths are ones found by the heart and not solely of the mind. It requires that the mind unlock his caged heart to understand these truths, yet he is in too great of a fear to do so, believing such an action would cause unimaginable pain and the loss of his reason he holds so dearly to. Yet his heart, a forever ravenous beast that constantly searches for those things it deems to be the greatest treasures known to mankind, ceaselessly attacks the bars of his cage and instills terror into the man, for he does not wish to be devoured by the beast. And so, he takes his reason and infuses it with falsehoods, feeding to the beast to send it into a sleep of deluded dreams, making it placid. Now, the logical man is no longer in fear of being consumed, but he must continue in his feeding of the creature, for it is a beast that is easily awakened if one is not careful. I hope this was a fairly apt description.
Beautifully stated, and well understood ;) Except the sleeping man KNOWS his evils, they are far to.. read moreBeautifully stated, and well understood ;) Except the sleeping man KNOWS his evils, they are far too dark and out in the open now, his secrets, to hide any longer. But he uses the lies of logic to make the truth, which sadly for him, all now know, seem less bad. If he can lean on his logic as he always does, even to try and explain away the darkest of deeds, then he is becomes infallible, above reproach, at least to himself. Your theory is very accurate. You are attentive.. The poem also illustrates that he, and people often like him, have their eyes intentionally closed to intangible realms and things that cannot be proved by science. Thank you for the review and the thorough interpretation. Hope you enjoyed the read ;)
... Misty
8 Years Ago
I did enjoy the read, yet In truth I found that I had to go over it several times to understand its .. read moreI did enjoy the read, yet In truth I found that I had to go over it several times to understand its meaning. I am remindinded of quote by Gilbert K. Chesterton: "The madman is not the man who has lost his reason. The madman is the man who has lost everything except his reason."
8 Years Ago
It is simple. It's about the haves and the have - nots... . belief and disbelief. If those of us w.. read moreIt is simple. It's about the haves and the have - nots... . belief and disbelief. If those of us who believe should be called mad for it... And the story of one of the have nots (disbelievers)... skeptics, who uses lies and "logic" to paint everything as truth, according to him. When in fact, this man is emotionally and spiritually "asleep" to the real truth, which he, himself cannot handle... And that this slumber is intentional... ;)
Yes, madness to me, is expecting that there is a heaven and a hell, but no minions of either realm exist? That all that we see is all that there is?... Now that is madness ;)
i loved the imaginative thoughts here.... the words you have used are quite amazing....it flows beautifully... thought provoking and very well presented work.... beautiful concept.... the title is intrigue too.... full ratings... god bless you....
OK, I think I see why our paths have crossed. Your words relate to me in ways you, I'd allow, would not imagine! Thank you so much for listening to your amazing muse and sharing it with us (ME).
"True suspense, true... terror, doesn't jump in your face with a hockey mask. No, no...It starts very, very slowly, creeping up your spine and into the space where your hair trickles onto your neck.".. more..