The Road

This is a poem I wrote for my church on easter sunday. It is the view point of the thife.

        I walk along the long dirt road, carrying a large piece of wood. I have met a lot of people. Most of them good, but I have hurt them for my own gain. I have met more people on the road, they joined me on walk I was making alone. Not alone on the road anymore it makes it bearable to move on. Still hurts though to go on. Why must it be so long? I walk on and I have come upon the end of the road. Way up high upon a cliff looking down on the grove. I lay down for a moment of rest for sure of its end. I am pinned upon the large piece of wood, gasping for a breath. I looked over to see who it was that came with me. I couldn’t believe my eyes it was the king who was next to me. Seeing him with a crown of thorns, bloody, battered and bruised I heard someone shout some scorns. I hear him shout back Father; forgive them for they not know what they do. It was then I realized it was I too who has nailed him there, it was me all along my selfish ways has made it long. I asked myself Lord my God what have I done. I looked in his eyes and said Forgive me for now I know what I have done. I want salvation now I know I have done wrong.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the story and the desire of this poem. When we learn. We make mistakes and ask for forgiveness. Then we will truly know peace. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Ayanda Mteto]

There is something about the spirutual quest, that always grab my facination, perphers it is my hunger for truth and spiritual emacipation. I love your insight about the gospel, a very good write.

[❀ Gabriela ..]

Wow. Beautiful, powerful poem. Really great job.

[Snowflake]

I saw the picture of the story and just knew that it had to be Christian.
You told this story beautifully.
May God bless you!

[Mark D]

Should the first line be " I walk along the long dirt road"? or "I walk alone along the long dirt road"?

When you say "Meeting more people on the road, they joined me instead of them." I am not sure who "them" is referring to.

Should "that I am sure it’s still there" be "that I am sure is still there"?

I do not understand this sentence...."It was then I realized it was I who has nailed him too, it was me all along my selfish ways has made it long." When you say "nailed him too" i don't know if you mean as well as someone else??? When you say "selfish ways has made it long." Do you mean the road? The listener may have forgotten the long road by this point as you are talking about the king.

Hope this helps a bit! Good luck reading it.

Any help with this this poem would be much appriecated it is going to be read on easter sunday moring 4-8-2012