weepers

Listen close,

       The story of the weeper will bring him closer.

                                           Weeper

When a lonely country boy grew up and found no one to love, he decided to die, unable to live with sorrow. He poisoned himself and met death. Death decided to let him be happy and give him revenge on what he never had, a love. Death told him in his cold voice " I have seen this many times in my days I shall give you one wish for i have wishes to please you, using your ability to cause harm." As the lonely country boy wished, "For a revengeful after life I wish to take the tears and weeps of the sad for they have not been through anything as tough as I" As death gave him the wish he turned into a breathless beast with large gray wings and a wrinkled grey body. Death gave him the order "This is how to work your mystic ability: you must sweep in and ripe their very emotions from their heart and they shall live a whole sad life with know one to love." As the beast grew he gouged one word: Weeper.

         So when your unhappy, and you cry, don't let the weeper find you.

Author's Note

it just came to mind...

Reviews

[EylonBear]

it's a very good short story. few typos but easily fixed. the idea is good. also even though it's short it doesn't sound rushed. it sounds almost like a Grimm fairy tale.

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Wow...such a perfect compact story....a top write....perfection xD

[SOUL LESS]

I like the idea presented..but please dun try to stretch it too much. And definitely not to a book. It's an okay write, but I shall retain the concept presented in my mind for such times :)

[Dahlia Phoenix]

That's just terrifying. The story of a lone person who endured so much pain and now is gifted with the same power to bring that upon the weak. This tale is unbelievably descriptive and the darkness portrayed. I love it!

[paparapapa]

This is great. A lot of stuff to edit, but I liked the story. Keep on writing! ;)

[Coyote Poetry]

This is a amazing short story. Take great talent to write a complete story in so few words. You could expand this story into a book. A very good character to base a book on. I like the storyline and the ending. Thank you for a outstanding story.
Coyote