~ Dervish

~ One who let in all, shall receive all...

~ Dervish

 

Where land faded, and sandstorms blew

I found the ground of comfort

Pearls of heavenly teardrops, never touched

The beauty of the land, as it was rich

Solved and smiling grand

 

Mint tea I sipped when I sat in some places

Eyes, open to all the livingly mazes

An opening world of the old rich cultures

Relived by yourself in a travel of mind

Hardly to muse, but easy to find

 

Miles away from home, and so divinely rich

Realms of stories, punched through my chest

Mystery in a thousand ways, questioning

The daily grace, still I wonder why I smelled

Your perfume there so overwhelmed

 

As a fresh breeze tickling on my nerves

You passed by through mighty ways

Knocking on my soul and kiss my aura

I Loved to feel the frosty nights,

And your warmly breath around me tight

 

There is a way I find you in every continent

As I breathe or drink your seductive poison

I only not die of it but reborn and rebirth

Like you know telepathy smiles in a million silent words

Yes, Yes, Dervish soul, of heaven you shall be heard

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Travel with me... I wink at you...
xx

Reviews

[Not Your Typical New Yo..]

I really like when poems take me to a whole different place in a writer's mind, let it escape from reality and jump right into the writer's imganation! You're poem did that. You decribe beautifully! It's very mysterious but romantic in a weird and brilliant way. You really should become a published writer. You're poetry book will rank the charts!

Did I already said thank you Gregster? ;) my friend, well now, Thank you so much!

[Allie]

"Knocking on my soul and kiss my aura" I am in love with this line, it is such a perfect way to express loving somebody fully. Your writing is unique in it's own way and so beautifully put together. This piece seemed to tickle every one of my senses and leave great imagery in it's wake.

Re reading.... and your thoughts, and words are blissful my friend.... thank you so much!

[light and ashes]

Speechless...I can not think of any words to do this piece justice. So I ll just let my rating speak for itself, 100 :)

[RedInk524]

It is difficult to have much adventure without travel outside one's zone of familiarity.You never know what you may find, and as shown in your poem, one of those things is Love. So many people search for love, and for those who believe in "soul mates" this can be quite the difficult and often disheartening task. And so it is obvious that one should venture out, visit new regions and countries, because there are trillions of people all over this world and ANY one of them could be the hand waiting to fill yours. This poem is a beautiful example of that, very good work. Oh, and i like your little "grammar mistakes" found in most of your poems. Its like a cute little signature of yours that can tell me its your work without me being told.

[Cassie Fraga]

and I wink back... I MISSED YOU ELI!!! your work.... aaaawww like a breath of fresh air.... you grasp me with such ease in this write, and the music fits perfect!!
LOVE TO YOU SIS!! BEAUTIFUL WRITE!!!

[realmwriter]

I would travel anywhere with you. I read this and traveld to where Whirling Dervishes dance until I they make me dizzy. Very good write.
I would most certainly like to go here.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the places you took me with your poem. The music added to the beauty of the poem. I would like to travel. Sip tea and learn new places. Thank you for the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Aianarie (INACTIVE)]

The romantic language of this poem is just gorgeous. It painted a vivid image in my mind that will remain there for quite some time. A mysterious, memorable write!

[Corset]

This is so exotic and romantic, it's like falling in love with an essence, beautiful.

[MOON]

This is a lovely mysterious write captured perfectly by the picture . Like going from door to door an initiate into the Sufi path, yet also a travelogue. The music with the Blue Mosque in the background and the clouds coming out of the musicians Fez adds to the aura and depicts Turkey and Istanbul so well. Beautiful