~ Dervish

~ One who let in all, shall receive all...

~ Dervish

 

Where land faded, and sandstorms blew

I found the ground of comfort

Pearls of heavenly teardrops, never touched

The beauty of the land, as it was rich

Solved and smiling grand

 

Mint tea I sipped when I sat in some places

Eyes, open to all the livingly mazes

An opening world of the old rich cultures

Relived by yourself in a travel of mind

Hardly to muse, but easy to find

 

Miles away from home, and so divinely rich

Realms of stories, punched through my chest

Mystery in a thousand ways, questioning

The daily grace, still I wonder why I smelled

Your perfume there so overwhelmed

 

As a fresh breeze tickling on my nerves

You passed by through mighty ways

Knocking on my soul and kiss my aura

I Loved to feel the frosty nights,

And your warmly breath around me tight

 

There is a way I find you in every continent

As I breathe or drink your seductive poison

I only not die of it but reborn and rebirth

Like you know telepathy smiles in a million silent words

Yes, Yes, Dervish soul, of heaven you shall be heard

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Travel with me... I wink at you...
xx

Reviews

[Not Your Typical New Yo..]

I really like when poems take me to a whole different place in a writer's mind, let it escape from reality and jump right into the writer's imganation! You're poem did that. You decribe beautifully! It's very mysterious but romantic in a weird and brilliant way. You really should become a published writer. You're poetry book will rank the charts!

Did I already said thank you Gregster? ;) my friend, well now, Thank you so much!

[Michael G. Smith]

Great piece that took me by the collar and took along to your foreign lands.

Thank you again mister Smith...

[Pól]

I could drink this draught, posioness it may be, til the morning pushes out night. Brilliantly poetic.

Çok çocuk arkadaşı teşekkür ederiz.
Ben gerçekten takdir.....

[Pól]

I'm gonna have to google that. the only Turkish I could master was "thank you", and that was with some difficulty!

P.s. google translate will rape it.... I said, thank you very much kind friend. And that I really appreciate it.

It has many different ways to say it in Turkish, you can also say: "Teşekkü ederim" arkadas, ... gule gule...

"Teşekkür ederim" (forgot the "R") oopsie...

[Pól]

I had guessed it would be some like that-the music is gorgeous

Thanks a lot, you listened to Mercan Dede.... he's awesome. So glad I have his signature... :P

[Legion]

Oh Scheherazade! You bring to mind her gift of imagination. Wonderful piece.

Love your word "Scheherazade" you're clever.... :) narrator ;)
I loved to read your thoughts,

E.L.

[Legion]

All 1,001? :)

1,001 nights yes, where olive jars were sealed in Damascus, and their love was clear by date more than 3 years old, then you could trow it away... where one was hanged for stealing an apple on the market, and hang on the higest tree of the main square ... where all the ali baba, robbers are the boss .... but so stupid, the same time.... yes, I read all... ;)

[Legion]

:)

[Sugar Plum ♥]

so amazing, full with energy, magical and sensual in a way! The music of the dervishes is always like a spring from aother world. I loved the way you let me travel with your soul-poem to another places even far away, but near to my heart.

So glad you enjoyed this one :) Thank you x

[Sugar Plum ♥]

no need fo rthanks, as I`m really happy and enjoy your poems! time we always have if we need it :)

Anyhow, I still thank you. Your words mean a lot!

[Empirik]

Yes, amazing! Such an honest and wonderful write. I am breath-taken by this beauty. Seriously! I feel that fire like it would turn a sandstorm into glass. X :)

Yes, only that heat can over a 200 degrees melt it.... mmmm ;)

[A. V. Madison]

Wow. Stellar. Rating=100!!

Thank you deeply! :)

[Tommy]

You craft a nice feel in this piece, bringin a longing bit of emotion through your words. A little flow is lost in a couple of lines for me, but you pick it back up...

Great Write!
RLG,
Tommy

Thank you Tommy :)

[Sami Khalil]

I love it. Good write and music. Real artistic.

Thank you so much Sami, just see your review now here...

[Sami Khalil]

You are always welcome.... Smiling ....

:)

[Plotosaurus]

You create some nice imagery with this poem. Also, the photo and music fit well. I would suggest that you reread your poem with an eye to removing unnecessary commas. Sometimes they hinder the flow.
Best of luck with your writing and keep up the good work.

Thank you, when it's day tomorrow in the Netherlands I shall watch those comma issues... great you are helping me! :)

[Joshua W. Harris]

The more I read of your work, the more I am taken aback by it.
You've got a talent for beautiful poetry, and that is a certainty.
Well done. =]

Thank you :)